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    Currently working on. Please critique!

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    fixed size

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    I like the rendering you've got going, but the face on the figure positioned further up is a little addled. The lips are... strange. I think it's positioned a little far to your right. The eyes are extremely far apart and she's cross eyed.

    A good way to spot these things is to flip the piece horizontally in photoshop.

    The teeth on the lower character need more shading to give her less of a bucktooth appearance.

    That said, I really like your linework.

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    Whose arm is this?

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    Quote Originally Posted by TerryGillooly View Post
    Whose arm is this?
    its supposed to be the lower girls arm, but i focused too much on her neck and not her shoulders so it got lost.
    ill be posting revision in a few minutes.

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    Ah, now I see. Looks good so far. (Except you need to fix the size again )

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    damn my links come out so big.
    too lazy o;
    if it really a problem ill change though

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    Quote Originally Posted by spiritvanished View Post
    too lazy o;
    Just fix it. If you're too lazy to make your pics properly viewable, then everyone in here might just as well to be too lazy to give any help to you. So, little bit of courtesy helps since you're asking help and all.

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    Nice work on the mouth, but her eyes are still... wonky. The eyebrow and the eye just aren't positioned correctly relative to each other. They're both telling me different things about the structure of the face. And her gaze is off, too.

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    Quote Originally Posted by TinyBird View Post
    Just fix it. If you're too lazy to make your pics properly viewable, then everyone in here might just as well to be too lazy to give any help to you. So, little bit of courtesy helps since you're asking help and all.
    I dont at all intend to create an argument,
    but you quoted me out of context.
    if the size was really a huge deterrent ill change it.
    which i will. (:
    albeit i had a typo, but was afraid to lose my details.

    completely understand where your coming from though.
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    Currently working on.  Please critique!
    it wouldnt resize in attachments. dont know why. tried everything.

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    Not the best redline I've done but I seriously can't understand what her expression is. Is she smiling or grimacing?
    Currently working on.  Please critique!
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    You really should've done some construction work before you started to detail those faces.
    Especially for the woman in the left, she has a huge head, tiny arm and really short neck.
    And I'm fairly confident that the woman on right has burrowed inside the others ribcage.

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    Her hand isn't backwards Tiny - forefinger on the top, you can't see the thumb - she's gripping the top of the bath, or thats how I read it.

    These two are terrible tobogganists thats one slim bath...

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