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    Red face Asami the cyborg nurse

    okay all finished.
    C: finally.

    inspired by:
    junko mizuno, neon genesis evangelion (strongly in her outfit),miss a, brown eyed girls.

    Uhm, I suck at designing "robotic outfits" i usually gie them too much skin.
    So there was a lot of influence in that area.

    she is the villian~ and
    she'll have a brother soon so look out.

    i think im going to redo hana/jumeko and Nil so this can be a series. c:

    oh and the syringes are weapons. yuh.

    i really hope this gets to stay in the finished thread.~

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    i'm detecting some anatomical distortion. here's a redline (well, blue line in your case due to the red bg), hope it helps. the arm I added isn't quite correct; I just stuck it in there cuz I was wondering wheretf it went in the first place. love the style and rendering so far.

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    Quote Originally Posted by FourTonMantis View Post
    i'm detecting some anatomical distortion. here's a redline (well, blue line in your case due to the red bg), hope it helps. the arm I added isn't quite correct; I just stuck it in there cuz I was wondering wheretf it went in the first place. love the style and rendering so far.
    Her other arm is behind held upward and bent behind her head

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    Not really, I only noticed some proportional issues cos you bought them up. Execution is spot on otherwise, good abstraction going on here as well with use of the red background

    Larger than life
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    Very cool image !

    there were only a few things that were distracting to me:

    from the neck down the whole torso ....it is gorgeous....really nice technique with rendering it...soft but yet still in your face.

    the hand holding the syringe seems too big and if you just replaced it with a more slender feminine hand it would help alot.

    Also the syringe is a bit distracting ( the one she is holding ) only because it isn't drawn straight . just redo it -draw it as a separate layer so you can get you crisp edges and comp it back into the piece.

    also i might take another pass at her face as well- use a similar technique to the one where u did the torso but make it really clear and crisp. Id would just take the face that you have ...copy it .....scale it up 75% ....work on it with all the detail then scale the same head image back down and comp it into place.....

    just my thoughts

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    awesome stuff tho man






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    Quote Originally Posted by Charles Ratteray View Post
    Very cool image !

    there were only a few things that were distracting to me:

    from the neck down the whole torso ....it is gorgeous....really nice technique with rendering it...soft but yet still in your face.

    the hand holding the syringe seems too big and if you just replaced it with a more slender feminine hand it would help alot.

    Also the syringe is a bit distracting ( the one she is holding ) only because it isn't drawn straight . just redo it -draw it as a separate layer so you can get you crisp edges and comp it back into the piece.

    also i might take another pass at her face as well- use a similar technique to the one where u did the torso but make it really clear and crisp. Id would just take the face that you have ...copy it .....scale it up 75% ....work on it with all the detail then scale the same head image back down and comp it into place.....

    just my thoughts

    - C

    awesome stuff tho man






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    thank you especially.
    you gave me much to work in terms of taking my piece to the next level!
    greatly appericated!

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    I especially like the syringes and also the render of the skin. But I think the red bakground is way to saturated and dominating. Beside that I don't really get any cyborg feel from her or that the syringes are her weapons

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    Ohh...she's cute)))

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    the things that bother me are that the lower half of the body seems too stretched out in comparison to the top half of the body and one of the hands looks a little big.

    Great colours and render though. Great skill.

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    Very cute~! My only critique besides what others said would be that the shading in her face could use a bit more color detail. As opposed to the rest of her body, it's a little lacking, but still very good piece :3

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    thank you all very much for the feedback and replies.
    I most certainly will go back and redo the face, adding shadows and dimensions.~
    and im sure ill redo the syringes at some point.
    every comment has helped me to look at the piece in a new way
    and im excited to patch it back up and make it its best! 3.

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    I agree with everyone else, all I have to add is that the hand looks a little awkward-it doesn't seem to be actually going around the cylindrical syringe, it looks as if it's more-pinching it? It stops the syringe from looking 3-dimensional. Great job though otherwise.

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    The ONLY problem I have with this piece is... I don't see a cyborg. *shrugs*

    But all in all, it's really good!

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    i think when i go back, ill try out more wires, bolts, chiplike patterens etc. to see what looks best.

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    nice loose.

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    Quote Originally Posted by kait View Post
    nice loose.
    loose?

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