first:one thing: «less is more» -Mies Van Der rohe
its like you're trying to put all of your ideas in one painting, most of the time the simplest ideas are the best.
heres what i think you should do with your composition:
so that the viewer has a better grasp of the actual idea you are trying to convey ( a painting within a painting) you need to make the painting in the painting stand out more, I like the fact that its blending in but i think its not serving the piece right. you should try to go totally opposite to the environment of the painter ( just a personal suggestion), thats what i would try at least
pretty much all i think you should take off is in red, also try to work on the women in the painting , she looks like shes popping out of nowhere even if its suppose to be seen as is... you should try to integrate her within the landscape
Last edited by joelle; March 16th, 2011 at 02:06 PM.
Reason: forgot to say something
Joelle -Thank you for the crit and tips, you have reason, sometimes I have a tendency to do things like Arcimboldo did in his paintings I'm going to change that...I hope so, meanwhile I'm changing some elements as you suggest me to do, cheers.
Shia-Luciel: Thank you for the tip, I'll do it..there is like a sunset in the scene but surely I'll be adding more deep into the background and volume, cheers.
This is another idea I'm having in mind..
PS: I changed my account since I forgot the oldest.
Last edited by greenpizza; June 30th, 2011 at 04:42 PM.
hey ! im glad to see you took my advice It looks much better , now it breaths... I like your style, it reminds me somehow of a mix between byzantin art and frida kahlo I would suppose all of the anatomy «errors» (ex: small hands) are intended as is ? the perspective is still akward on the first painting, but yeah id leave it be...
for your next piece I would suggest to refine the face, hair and neck, its really blurry and theres some anatomy mistakes with the nose and eyes (one is too big and perspective on the nose is weird. check your reference) since you go really big on details its seems off that from neck up its so blurry.
I'M not feeling the chinese fan and knife? it doesnt sit well with her expression, background and dress.
thats something im noticing in your drawings: theres inspiration taken from a lot of culture, its not a bad thing , its just thats it just makes the scene harder to grasp for the viewer.
I don't think the back ground is too light. If anything it's too dark. There should be some atmospheric perspective in there. The further your scene gets into the back ground the less saturated it should be.
Thank you for the comments,
Joelle. Interesting thoughts.
yes,there're anatomy errors; the hands are small, perspective is not good at all, and blury regions, thanks for pointing that! I'll change it.
umm, I was thinking in one sword-knife, but thinking about you told me, it has more sense one Umbrella there, I'm working in that very slowly, hehe, .
Abone114: Thank you for the point, actually I'm trying to find a good brush similar as the Digital Airbrush works in Painter, since I got recently Photoshop CS5, I'm trying to find the correct tools to work with and create my owns.
Here a little change.
Good Day there!.
Last edited by greenpizza; August 2nd, 2011 at 10:53 AM.