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    How to improve this

    This is a WIP of a t-shirt design and if anyone can give some feedback or if anyone knows how to draw instruments, your input is appreciated.

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    Her pose feels very stiff and rigid to me. I think you should make your lines more flowing, specifically in her upper arms where her biceps and stuff are. The contour lines are just STRAIGHT and it looks unnatural. I like the solid black/white look though.

    Edit: It would probably help to photograph yourself in this pose (or find one online), turn it to B/W and bring the contrast up. Then you can see how the stronger lighting and shadows work and mimic that.
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    And then God said, "Let us make man in our likeness and our image. Let us make him ridiculously hard to draw so that poor artists everywhere will have to spend 10,000+ hours failing repeatedly before they can begin to capture the form and likeness onto a two-dimensional surface." And there was man. And it was good. And artists everywhere lost their minds.

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    Maybe this one helps?

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    Hahaha. Well whaddya know.
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    And then God said, "Let us make man in our likeness and our image. Let us make him ridiculously hard to draw so that poor artists everywhere will have to spend 10,000+ hours failing repeatedly before they can begin to capture the form and likeness onto a two-dimensional surface." And there was man. And it was good. And artists everywhere lost their minds.

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    Here is an update.

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    Hi BluePepper

    I think at the very least her left hand (on our right) needs some serious work. Right now it looks completely boneless and malformed.

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    Recognize the shapes in your ref when trying to convert to simple line. Her right arm, holding the alto sax is broken inwards and flat. The shape of the sax is distorted because you took the business end and pointed straight at the view, instead of off to the left to see it in a slight profile, giving the feel of 3 dimensions.

    Take your ref photo, print it in greyscale, and trace the shapes & shadows of the sax & figure to get a better sense of the shapes on & of the form.
    "Everything must serve the idea. The means used to convey the idea should be the simplest and clear. Just what is required. No extra images. To me this is a universal principle of art. Saying as much as possible with a minimum of means."
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