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    Point out my mistakes

    Could you guys be so kind as to point out what mistakes I might have made on the colouring of the skin. (So not the hair or the towel-thing since that ain't really done)

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    When I zoom out quite a bit, her eye-area looks ... odd.

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    Just noticed her further shoulder isn't really rendered correctly.

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    Well...the main problems start with the drawing so make sure that is acccurate first. As far as lighting - it just seems made up and is not really accurate to real world lighting. Did you use reference for this or just imagination?

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    All imagination.

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    I feel like her eyelids are a little bit too tilted. Try and draw some perspective lines across particular planes of the head - the brow, the top of the forehead, etc. And then line your eyelids up with the resulting focal point. That'll make your eyes look better because at the moment they are poorly aligned.



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    Are they really that badly aligned?



    I intentionally wanted to try slanted eyes, I might have gone overboard, I'm not sure. I suppose I should look for some possible reference pictures.

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    I think there's more problem that she has weird "drunk eyes" where the other is squinting, other looking normally (like the eyes wouldn't be from the same pair) and the eyes don't really seem to look anywhere.

    (whoop, ignore the off-perspective-ness of the nostril I drew there, but note that from that view there should be a little bit of the other side of nostril-thing visible.)

    Also the shading is really inconsistent, especially near the mouth, seeing how she has this weird mouth expression. The side of mouth that's not smiling shouldn't have that much shadow, seeing how the nose isn't casting any, despite being half in shadow....

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    Before you bother about lighting, bother about getting the form right. Good lighting on skewed form still produces bad lighting overall.

    So - fix the perspective, and fix the anatomy. Continuing with color right now will only get you more stuck.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kweckduck View Post
    All imagination.
    OK - that is the main problem. There is a major misconception common to beginning/inexperienced artists that they should somehow be able to work from imagination and be accurate. In reality even the most experienced masters work from reference - usually the live model but sometimes photography (their own).

    I would suggest using reference for a piece like this and doing plenty of life drawing for practice.

    Also your "redline" measurement diagram is wrong - you have the lines going straight across the face when they should wrap around the form/volume of the head and face.

    Keep working at it (not this piece - just start fresh) but make sure you're working with the right concepts and approach. Spend a BUNCH of time in the fine arts threads looking at the excellent figure and portrait artists in there - RaileyH, KevinWueste, AztecFireflower, and many others.

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