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    Recipe for Power

    Ok guys, i need help.
    i have been working on this thing for 3 days now and i need some feedback
    its pretty much my version of Poseidon
    im not too sure if im happy with some of the color in it.
    i think the siren thats holding the clam needs to get some bounce light on her back.
    any other suggestions are welcome

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    Ah man, I'm loving this piece. The use of light is just gorgeous. The only thing I can see is that you could probably use some deeper shadows. Right now everything is pretty bright.

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    Looks pretty good. The first thing that jumped out at me is the lack of caustic projections on them. This may help:
    http://gurneyjourney.blogspot.com/2008/06/caustics.html
    http://gurneyjourney.blogspot.com/20...flections.html

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    This is cool man. I really like the design of everything, especially the hair!

    A few things are buggin' me. The body of the reclining figure is pretty ambiguous there. She seems to just dissipate into tentacles...which are wrapping around the other woman? If that is the case, I would crop down more so you can show this is the case without confusion. Or, I would just change it and make her have a normal body.

    The tentacle behind the clam woman looks like a third arm of hers.

    The yellow color on top of the vents is out of place IMO. It really draws a lot of attention. If you want that color, I think you'll have to put more color throughout instead of just there. Or, just desaturate it.

    Is he in the grip of siren mind control? Or are they more like his entourage?

    Regarding the clam woman's back shadow. I think it is a great compositional shape and I would keep it dark. But some subtle bounced light would look good too.

    Some caustic effects might look sweeeeet. But it will definitely make them look like theyre in even more shallow water which is odd for poseidon IMO.

    Is his throne too perfect looking? Maybe it should be more organic with coral and such?

    Nice links andrew.

    Nice painting Mam

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    I think there should be no light on her back. Right now the light perfectly surrounds the area of happenings, if you light up her back it could destroy the composition because it leads out of the situation. Eventually you coould try to push her more to the right end of the picture. Probably however the whole scene together eventually should be centered more.

    Also I think that the head of poseidon and especially the octopus women on the lower left is too small compared to the body. Poseidon sure could stand out more, by making his body looking taller (resizing the head).

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    I agree with the above comments.

    I would add that it looks like they are in shallow water which is strange. Also they are to clear to be in water they need to be a bit more diffused.

    Oh what's up with the seashell he's holding?

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    thanks for all the feedback guys, i am going to take it all into account.
    you guys have helped a bunch, i will post a link from this thread to the final when complete

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