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    Critiques welcome

    Here are two sketches inspired after reading Cormac McCarthy's The Road I scanned a line drawing then worked over the image in Photoshop. Been trying to experiment with textures and even drawing straight lines, and perspective lines are a hassle

    Any tips and critiques are much appreciated


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    These look really nice. I like the mood and atmosphere you've created in your rendering and composition.
    My only suggestion for now is in the first one, either move the long cast shadow line down or otherwise move the silhouettes of the people up/out to break that line better, because it feels like those are almost tangent-ing now. I think it would help with visual interest also.

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    Nice stuff but my problem is that values are almost same everywhere in the first one. Where shadow and all the way until horizon. You need to add atmospheric perspective to both images. Further the image goes away down the road of the first, it will become more light, harder to see and it will start blending with the sky. Second, you should push those buildings further by making them lighter and creating distance. That way it will show that the bridge is a lot further from the buildings in the background and as you move to the left, buildings should get lighter and lighter. I would suggest adding a few brighter highlights on your focal point so it looks like that sun light is coming through dark and heavy clouds.

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    I liked that movie , but to be honest, and I don't know if it was my current mood or something, I really felt extremely depressed throughout the whole movie.
    And comments above already said everything I would've said
    And your portfolio is brilliant, your figure drawings are really great!
    keep it up!

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    Wooblood- thanks, I dropped the shadow line of the bridge

    Damjan- Thanks, you make perfect sense. I've made some adjustments. Let me know if it reads better.

    Aretoon- Cheers, I recommend the book its pretty freaky!! I saw the trailer after I read the book and was a little dissapointed... that said I will watch it. The book is much more gritty, and I got the feeling that the whole worlds been scorched, his writing is very visual.



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    Good way of giving a desolate post apocalyptic feeling.
    Some issues have been covered. Two things though ( take them with a grain of salt as I am no master):

    First picture, first iteration: The contrast and lines in the first picture focus my attention in the distance, and my eyes have a tendency to exit the picture immediately on the upper right . If you want to show me the two characters composition needs to change. More contrast near them, less contrast in other places. If you want me to enjoy the scenery , the composition needs to change. Right now my eyes enter where the near shadow contrasts with the road, go to top then exit on the right. ( The second iteration with the brighter spot on the left is better, i kinda follow the bridge down to the characters, but not enough contrast there so i remain anchored on the lighting pole but that's not very interesting for me to look at )

    The second picture I like more, just that I'd prefer for the two characters to occupy a different place in the picture, not as much to the right , as are there are some areas to the left, ( top and bottom too) that are a bit too large and don't really tell me much. I get that the feeling is that they are alone in this huge space, but it may be overdone a bit. Here is what I mean:

    Critiques welcome

    Of course you can bring the foreground details (such as the street sign that was visible in the upper left corner) to overlay in this reduced frame as well, to properly close off/ frame the illustration.
    I like that they are headed from left to right, and from up to down, that really helps with the hardships and downward spiral feeling.

    Will appreciate critique anywhere, anytime .
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    Oddo- cheers, I like the crop, it doesn't seem as daunting to get into the detail a lot more with less space.... I 'll give it a shot

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    I LOVE IT. Especially the second one. Great job bro, the force be with you.

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    Heavens- Thanks bro!

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