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    death and girl

    start-scetch inspired by schuberts string quartett - done in mypaint. critique is welcome! thanx

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    It's all pretty vague right now, but I can see some problems with what I can make out. She has a hunchback, Her arm is too big. Maybe you should start over from her ribcage up. It's pretty awkward to look at.

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    @Raoul Duke- Are you sire you've not mistaken her breast as a head? From what I see, her head is the darker shape above the shoulders.

    Saw your post, and could only see the problems if I made out the breast as her head.

    I think it's good, but def lacks some details and defined 'form'.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Spazzin View Post
    Are you sire you've not mistaken her breast as a head?
    It looked like her head to me.

    There's something weird with her right shoulder. Like her shoulder muscle goes all the way around, making her back look really wide.

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    Haha, even if I try, I can't imagine her breast being her head. I guess it goes to show how differently people can perceive art.

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    Lol....

    Now that I stare into it, I can't make out a head any more. I would really like to see an update to this piece.

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    tried to lower values...shapes still not in the right places...
    and yes the dark spot is meant to be the head, a knot of hair.

    allot of work to do

    thanx for your comments

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    Looking a lot better, but now the woman's body looks really distorted. There is really something crazy with her right shoulder... and it's causing a lot of problems for the rest of her body. I also noticed the posing of both characters seems a little off. There isn't much sense of weight, especially the way she's being held. I wasn't sure if it was because that was on purpose (spirits are weightless).

    Keep up the good work.

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    found time to work on it...

    hope to fix all reminding issues at the next step, especially the head and the death's cloak, and turn it to a final. some greys will be added to give the pic more color.

    @muddus: weigthless spirits are a good excuse for my bad composition

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    The girl looks better in the previous drawing

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