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    Wasp working portfolio for CalArts--brutally honest feedback please!

    So I'm making my second attempt at applying to CalArts' 2d Character Animation program and I'm coming back with full force! I've registered into 2 figure drawing classes as well as going to a few open studios during the week.

    I'm constantly trying to keep myself in check by looking at accepted portfolios on the net and I've even joined animatedbuzz.com's forum which is a critique and FAQ for people interested in CalArts but haven't received much feedback on there. So it makes me worried that I may not be going in the right direction. Or perhaps I am but need someone to point out flaws and suggest alternate directions and focuses.

    This place seems to be filled with wildly talented artists and everyone seems to give such passionate feedback--the kind that would really help me out!

    Also, to give a basis on what CalArts looks for if that helps in your critique-- they encourage experimentation, uses of color and more of a focus on movement and style. Here's a recently accepted student's portfolio (whom I admire) for example: http://s782.photobucket.com/albums/y...ice/Portfolio/

    So here are my heart and soul's efforts so far:


    working portfolio for CalArts--brutally honest feedback please!

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    I know the head is too small in this one, but I'm wondering if there's any redeeming qualities in it? or should I just move on?

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    The following two is my attempt at making a realistic portrait and a cartoonish one. I'm think I'm going to work on doing a better set because these don't look that good to me anymore but I figured I'd share anyway.

    working portfolio for CalArts--brutally honest feedback please!

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    The following are questionable drawings. So I'm not sure what to make out of these and would especially like your opinions and feedback on them.

    working portfolio for CalArts--brutally honest feedback please!

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    working portfolio for CalArts--brutally honest feedback please!

    Thank you so much for looking and I'd really appreciate any and all feedback. Feel free to copy and paste links of particular pieces to analyze.
    Last edited by eel-hips; November 15th, 2010 at 06:57 PM.


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    Try to establish a clear line of action and follow through on the secondary forms. You have good line weight and your line is expressive but your proportion is off in all kinds of ways and it really detracts from the good things. I know it seems counter intuitive but slow down and think about your marks. Be more deliberate, you can still make the mark at the same speed but think about how you will make it before you do.

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    Really not bad, better than I was when I applied to my animation program. To add to what dpaint said, take note of your structure. In some drawings you have it pretty good, in others not so much. Joints are a problem with a lot of people (self included!) so i would definitely do some studies of how limbs attatch at the knees, ankles, elbows and wrists. All of these look like sustained poses. I go to Sheridan and when I submitted my portfolio they were only looking for 5 min gestures or less. If you can nail a 2 or 3 min gesture they will eat it up. Don't worry about faces at this stage, they are completely unimportant and actually take away from your drawing in most cases. Try to lighten your line and not be so heavy handed, draw your structure and block in forms lightly, then go in on a second pass and tighten things up. To add on your line weight, thicker lines bring things forward, thiner, receding, so use it if you can, but i doubt calarts is looking for such reformed techniques at this stage.....good work though keep it up. All it is is repetition and feedback and more repetition. Good luck!

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    if you are interested in what I submitted to my portfolio review, go to my blog and click 'life drawing' tag then look for the late 2008, early 2009 posts.

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    thank you for your critiques, dpaint and Sprogis7.
    what you both said was very clear and i appreciate it.
    and Sprogis7, thanks for sharing your blog. i can totally see what you mean by looking at how you handle gesture work. i'm going to work on getting the anatomy and proportions right before focusing on the details. the same goes for my gestures. i have a habit of getting in the shadows instead of focusing on clear lines and shapes. so i'll do just that for my next few classes and post back here. :]


    meanwhile i have much more work to share since my last time posting here!
    do you see improvements?

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    comin' atcha guys with some more! please, all i ask is for brutally honest feedback. tear it apart, guys.

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    brutally honest feedback please!

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    so here's pretty much the final order of my portfolio. the last two im rows im iffy about. do you think i should add any in?
    http://www.flickr.com/photos/godjira...7625350913374/

    id really appreciate any feedback. im going to be submitting my portfolio soon and im getting more and more unsure about my work. thanks in advance.

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    There are way, way too many images... You really want a minimal portfolio of your most solid work.

    http://calarts.edu/admissions/portfolio-audition/art
    On the CalArts page it even states, "You should submit approximately 20 images of your work". If you're applying to schools seriously, it's best to read their portfolio submission guidelines. From their page: "The portfolio should represent your program interest and direction, your aesthetic sensibility, and what you believe to be your strongest work."

    In this case, I also advise against using multiples of similar pieces, such as your face portraits of the same male model.

    Show your range, show your strengths, and good luck!

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    anjy, that's the wrong department you got your info on. i'm going for character animation, not fine art. and there's been accepted portfolios ranging from around 23 - 32 images. but i did write in my last post that the last two rows aren't final and i wanted to get some feedback on which to exclude and which to keep. plus you also have to keep in mind some of these images are small and more than one can fit on a page.

    however, i've already edited and reorganized which is why i came back to post new links and hopefully get more feedback.

    here's what i've got so far as the final portfolio
    http://www.flickr.com/photos/godjira...7625350913374/

    and these are the ones i don't know about. so if you think any should be included let me know!
    http://www.flickr.com/photos/godjira...7625506939251/

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    Interestingly, the CalArts character animation portfolio requirements page contains only this:

    A Good Portfolio

    As a rule of thumb, primarily won't include crap.


    Apply that advice as you will.

    Some of your work repeats anatomical errors, specifically shortened legs (shins in particular), very wide legs near the greater trochanter of the femur, and, for lack of better words, lumpy muffin top. The latter might in fact exist, but on numerous models? I'm not so sure. I see in your more current work a lot of these problems are going away. Maybe go back through your portfolio choices and remove the biggest offenders. Also, sometimes there is no indication of your seated models having any weight anywhere, they look like they are floating. This college doesn't seem to be keen on accuracy in life drawings, but it would behoove you to ensure your "inaccuracies" are means of expression and not just mistakes.

    I like the colored washes (watercolor?) the best. A few are more believable in terms of what colors of skin shadow or reflected light. Look at them again.

    If this were my portfolio, I'd nearly cut it in half. Consider the variety you have and narrow it down to one or two of each style. From nosing around a bit, it seems they put a lot of weight on experimentation. Repetition in your portfolio might be frowned upon.

    Good luck!
    Last edited by J@n!t; December 20th, 2010 at 01:40 PM.
    It took me like three hours to finish the shading on your upper lip. It's probably the best drawing I've ever done.



    My sketchbook (it'll get good near the end)

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