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    the cockpit

    hey all
    here's a piece that's almost finished but needs some more to make it happen...
    that's why i'm posting it to get feedback ,crits and suggestions
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    Looks pretty impressive, especially if all of that was drawn up from scratch.
    I'm not liking the motion blur on the internal lights since presumably the camera is travelling inside the cockpit and nothing else in the cockpit is motion blurred. Or was the camera shakey?
    One other thing that bothers me is that the hand gesture is pretty ambiguous. Is it reaching to press a button or is the guy signaling to the other ship? I have no idea. If the guy was giving a thumbs up or OK sign, it would give the image more of a cute human element to it.

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    hey!
    yes it was drawn frown scratch 100%
    (except for some real cockpit instruments here and there)

    i'm ok about the hand its just supposed to show the target as he is talking to the other pilot...

    will have to repaint it!

    about the internal blur ,mhh someone told me that he found
    it cool...not sure...

    thanks for the feedback!

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    This is great! The only issue I have is that it looks a little claustrophobic. It just looks like we're kinda crammed in this room with this guy. Maybe you want that (I dunno this could be a small cock pit or maybe it creates a mood), but if not maybe two steps need to be taken in the picture just to show more of the guy's body and the space around him. Maybe there needs to be more negative space between him and the ship too?

    The ship looks really awesome and so do the colors Awesome job.

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    Really nice work ! I like it ! As wooblood said, the only thing that 'bothers' me is the hand - it doesn't look anatomically correct (the thumb looks odd to me) and the gesture could be a lot stronger. Maybe you could keep it simple and just make it hold the ship's controls or something. And if he's pointing the other ship, the current framing doesn't allow for a nice composition I think - maybe he could point to a HUD screen that displays the other ship, this way you'd have a lot more room for composition. Anyway, I think this is a great painting, awesome work !

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    Hi.... you have done a really nice piece....

    The blur in the instruments could work more if it equally surrounds all the instruments... the way you painted could work more if the observer was stopped oustside the cabin, seeing the light trail...

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    ok here is another version with another hand
    tell me what you think:
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    Last edited by MoonChilD; October 2nd, 2010 at 09:44 AM.
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    cute

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    ok it's cute ,thanks
    what i'm asking is that :is it better with that hand or do i need to do something else?

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    I like the hand, but it kind of makes it silly. I'm not sure if you want that (which you might), but if you don't then perhaps something more involved like you had before.

    Maybe have both hands in the drawing? That way he feels more human. Also, the head in perspective is kind of odd. He looks like he is looking down while the ships looks like it's at our eye level. In other word it doesn't seem like he watching the ship. I think it has to deal with curve of his outfit right under the helmet.

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    ok
    now that's constructive!

    will find a way to get rid of that hand...i surely don't want to make it look silly!

    thanks

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    hey all!
    thanks for the crits !you can find the final version here:
    http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...54&postcount=1

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