Black Spot - I moved the ankle bone (tibia) back a little and softened it so itís hopefully less distracting now. I agree the swords look a bit dull - I used a plastic toy sword as a reference and they came out a bit rounded as a result. Itís on my list of stuff to fix.
matejkovacic - Thanks!
Psychobuddy - Thanks!
tobbA - Thank you!
Kambei Shimada - Yeah itís the Nine of Swords. But itís just a personal piece; Iím not doing the rest of the deck or anything.
Satu - Thanks, Iím glad you like it!
Zomg an update! I was planning to wait until the forums are fully functional again, but I just got this about as far as I can and wanted to share. Crit welcome of course!
It looks great.
The values are excellent but the thing I would consider is the lack of texture. You have metal, water, sand(?), all of which would have a very distinct feel to them. The fabric, skin and hair look good though. The colours gives it a nice ethereal quality.
Looking forward to getting my sketchbook up and running again once things cool off and the forum is back at full capacity. So how have you been?
I still think the ankle bone it too far to the front of the foot and not the side. I know you got a ton of critiques on the critique forum to work through, so I won't add any more.
I think it's looking nice. However I can't make much sense of the shadows of the swords. (Though that might have been intentional?) And I feel like maybe she should cast a shadow too. It would definately add to the feeling that she's floating. I also feel like I'd like to know what I'm looking at with the water and the sky. Right now it looks like a gooey ambiguos mass. Perhaps adding some foam from waves near the beach might help. That said I really like the dream like quality it has.
Oh what a beautiful painting! Gorgeous colours, it really appears to glow from the inside. What confuses me a bit is the swords: I thought at first that the blades seen on the top actually belong to the swords beneath her, coming from above in a space-warping way. I'm sorry that I have nothing useful to add aside from this, I can't really find technical flaws... I like that it has a slightly religious feel to it, at least that's the vibe I get, can't pinpoint it though.
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Oh crap, itís been a while! Whoops.. Lately Iíve been working on some writing projects, so Iíve been kind of neglecting my artwork and online presence. But since itís a new year and all, Iíd like to change that.
Thanks for all the crits for that last piece; I really appreciate every suggestion. I plan to get back to that soon and rework it based on the feedback Iíve received here and elsewhere.
In the meantime, here are some some sketches ní shizit.
[Reference image here!]
[Reference source here!]
From the natural history museum..
Maya studies (from Introducing Maya)
And this is a quick low-poly sword model I made to help me get the angle of the cast shadows in that tarot painting up in my last post.
Nice update. The horse is fine except for the front leg - you did better on the giraffe.
Black Spot - Thanks! I'll try to pay better attention to the front legs in the future
I was thinking of doing a piece about the little mermaid. My idea is to have her crawling onto land with the fish tail still attached but ripped and falling off, like a snake shedding its skin.
I did a some composition sketches..
Then I took my favorite 4 and did a quick value sketch for each. Right now I'm leaning towards #12.
dope stuff! I like #11 personally, but #12 would be nice if we could see her face too...
Hey Diedra! Thanks for the helpful comments in my sketchbook. I really like yours! I think that especially your digital paintings are awesome. Very naturalistic! Nice!
In the direction of animal anatomy, i have a book tip for you: http://www.amazon.com/Artists-Guide-.../dp/0486436403
I personally like this book, because it not only explains the form/anatomy of an animal, but also the purpose behind it. For example that the forelegs of horses are more like columns (straight), because they have to support most of the horses weight, while the hindlegs have a more dynamic structure to provide power and explosivenes. I think this is great, because it makes remebering way easier and it becomes easier to transfer knowledge to new animals, etc...
And i'm not sure, but maybe your linework could benefit from more hard angles. Your lines are very smooth (actually i like this and want to make my lines smoother ) and this is a good thing, if you want to present something smooth. But if you want to present something that has a harder form (for example men as opposed to women) harder angles can help to express what the form is like. What i want to say is: When you want to make a curved line, maybe think about if it's just two straight or slightly curved lines meeting in a not so strong angle. Example: The neck and/or forehead of the guy portrayed in post #248. I guess there should be slight angles...
I realize i didnt see many male faces in your sketchbook. Is this because you are uncomfortable with them (maybe because you think they look to feminine)?
cumquat & StonemasteR - Thanks guys, I'm gonna go ahead and use #12. I really appreciate your input, thanks again!
embee - I will definitely look into that book; thanks for the suggestion! I know, I almost never draw men. It's not because I find them difficult or intimidating to draw - I just don't find them as interesting to draw. I don't know why exactly. Whenever I come up with an idea for a piece, it's always centered around a girl. And if there is a guy, he's more like a prop of hers than a character in his own right. I have this problem in my creative writing as well. I don't really mind that I have a slant towards one gender in my work, but I really need to get some illustrations with male characters into my portfolio to show that I can draw them when necessary. Thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it!
I got a few comments that the hands in that photo study of my mother were distractingly bad, so I went back and reworked them based on some references I took of my own hands. I think now they kind of stand out for being the most detailed part of the image, but oh well. I sent her a huge print of it and she seems to really like it. (Click here to see the previous version.)
Here's a study of a photo of a skull (click here to see the reference)
And this is a still life I've been working on.
Very nice update! Your rendering is pretty sweet!
Small crit: The shadow of that wrist thing in the last image doesnt look right... maybe darken it where the wrist-thing gets closer to the ground?
What's up - are you getting lazy or what?
Manuel Baum - Hey, donít be mean! Iíve been painting, but I never seem to finish anything. And I hate just posting wips of stuff that goes nowhere. Oh well.
This is a painting of a revolver Iím working on. First is a simple model of it in Maya, which I did partially as Maya practice but also to help me nail the perspective. Then thereís a wip stage where I added a decorative Victorian design that I plan to have in the finished version, and lastly is the current wip.
Next is a study from life of a triceratops figurine I have on my desk. It has a really nice texture worked into the surface, and at this stage of the painting Iím just playing around with using different brushes to recreate that effect.
These are some thumbs I did for the current CHOW - Mech Engineer. I wanted to work in the Tibetan chuba (which is a loose woolen robe worn year-round) as a kind of coverall. In warm conditions, the robeís sleeve is removed and tied about the waist. I kinda liked the idea but not enough to take it further than this.
I have some other stuff lying around, but Iíll wait until theyíre further along to post them I think.
Thanks man. Yeah I love dinosaurs Too bad it has such a dull paint job, but that just makes it easier to study the texture so I shouldn't be complaining.
So lately I've been reworking the Nine of Swords image from the top post of this page based on critique I received about it. There are a still a few things people mentioned that I haven't done.. but I'm kind of at the point where I'm tired of looking at it and can't tell if it's just completely awful or not anymore. Nyuh.
It's definitely not awful haha - it looks great! Those changes really took it one level further.
Shoulder to the wheel, my friend!
My sketchbook - Harsh critique always welcome!
Very nice, Diedra!
I really like this last painting. Love the surreal element.
In general I'd say it's great as is.
You might be able to take it further, however, by utilizing your color saturation more decisively. i.e. instead of having there be royal blue throughout the painting, rather try putting it in a few select areas.
Also, now that I look back at it, I see that the strongest area of contrast is on the sword at the bottom right.
I don't know if you want to go back and change that, but it might be worth it to tone down the shining side of that one in the middle of those three.
Keep it up!
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Hey. Great sketchbook, you really do understand how to render the human form, your work has a very strong three dimensional feeling. If you ever do more wing studies buy a mixed salad for lunch! some leaves have really interesting structures. I hope to see more of your projects soon. Thanks for sharing so much over on the critic forum too.
bryanbeus - Thanks man! I definitely agree about the universal blue color over the background. I think it needs some yellow-green to tie it into the foreground as well as more saturation diversity. Iím undecided about whether I think the sword is too bright. I like that thereís a sword on the bottom and another on the top that are very bright and attract the eye because without that movement the composition might be too centered. I want the viewer to be pulled around the image through the swords and the angles they create. But that being said, it shouldnít be hard to make an alternate version to see how it looks.
I think Iím going to leave it as it is for now, but I might go back to it and touch it up in a few months with a fresh eye. Iím sure there are a few other things that will bother me by then as well Thanks for the crit!
Lydiamay - Thanks!
Dayle - Huh, I never thought of doing lettuce studies! Leaves are awesome though; Iíve been drawing dried leaves and they are so gorgeous. Thanks for the suggestion!
Lately Iíve been working on the painting of a trapped fairy from a few pages back. Iím still working on the wings, and I just realized that the perspective needs corrected (all the diagonal lines are parallel instead of converging on a vanishing point), and the webs need totally redrawn.. but at least that leaf in the back right looks great. I should cut out the figure and make that the focal point, lol.
Oh and I made a quick model in Maya of the wings to help me double-check the perspective and figure out what the shadow would look like.
Speaking of models, I made a quick gun thing for a ludum dare project a friend of mine was doing. They said it was supposed look like a Toblerone chocolate bar but with angular rings circulating the barrel. Kinda weird but fun.
They didnít finish the game, but they made a gif of the game world with the gun visible down in the corner. That kinda made my day :B
And this is a work in progress illustration featuring Heimdallr blowing Gjallarhorn at the end of the world. My idea is to have banners hanging off the lur that each show a stage of Ragnarok (since Heimdallr has foresight and knows whatís going to happen). I dunno what heís going to be wearing aside from the cape. I should probably do some thumbnails to figure that out at some point.
First a pen sketch then then current wip.
Hey dierat, thanks so much for the super helpful comment/crit in my SB! Much appreciated.
You've got a lovely SB here. The Nine of Swords is beautiful--especially the rendering of the fabric. Just, damn.
Looking forward to seeing how Heimdallr & the trapped fairy turn out.