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    Please critique!

    Been staring at this for a while, so it's difficult for me to see any issues.

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    I like the overall colors and especially the rock color. At the moment I find the scenery somewhat busy though. Maybe it's the overall composition or just the rock formation in the middle of the scenery, it feels as if my eye wonders around the picture unable to find a clear focal point or it has too many to choose from.

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    I'll build upon Juki's words.

    Right now there are a couple of area's in battle for my eyes focus. I don't know where to rest my eyes. It's going all over the place:

    1. The mountain in the middle,
    2. The waterfall in the middle of the two rock formations on the right part of the image,
    3. The waterfall on the right middle part of the image,
    4. The waterfall on the foreground.

    From the looks of it, #3 is winning right now. It has the highest high value close to the darkerst dark value creating a contrast which attracts my eye towards it. No matter where I look my eyes keep going back to it.
    The highlights in the waterfall in the back is making my eye stop there. Right now it's not really in the background. If you dull the blue a little bit I think that issue will be resolved.
    The mountain in the middle is done very well. I guess you want it to be the initial read for the image. Right now this mountain and the waterfall (#3) are competing for the attention the most. Dull the values of the waterfall a bit and the mountain will attract more attention.
    The lights in the foreground is messy. Your waterfall is catching a lot of light and is rather bright, yet the grass is dark and catching almost no light at all.

    One last thing, add some form of life in to the piece. Not humans, I guess that will kill the mood. But a flock of birds could do the trick. Like flying away from the mountain in the middle or something like that

    It's really a strong piece, the colors are amazing and the mood is great!

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    one thing you might try is toning done the contrast on the right most cliff facing. by putting a very light wash( low opacity) using the sky colour. it can push it a bit further back and create some nice atmosphere. just food for thought

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    Thanks a lot for the suggestions. I didn't realize how busy the pic is--still is--but after applying the crits I definitely think the pic looks more focused now and less chaotic. Next time i will do something less cluttered haha.

    Do you all think it the changes should be increased even more? Here's the earlier vers. for easier comparison:


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    some light stripe ion the foreground could work. the shiluette on the left is maybe too low in information, as its bigger and closer to us and still is so few attention to it. also maybe less details in far bg could make things more clear

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    Alright, here is my thought, your skill is very good, but in terms of content, well, I don't see anything very eye catchy in this pic. For example, the shape of mountain is repetitive, colors are repetitive, I don't know where to look and where is your "focus". For example, what if you have something red like a huge temple among the rock formation in the middle? Complementing the cool colors. Maybe put more love and stories into it next time.
    Still, I really admire your skill, I won't be able to paint that well.

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    Personally I'd add some sunlight to the grass in the foreground, just makes for an odd feel to have the viewer standing in a large shadowed area looking at sunlight in the distance. Also, the trees and/or foothill at the bottom left of the mountain could use more sunlight and shadow to visually separate it from the mountain.

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    Thanks for the crits; i definitely agree with them. I tried to make the best of it, but I think I'm going to lay this to rest and then return to the basics. Next time hopefully something better will result!

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    Wow. I like the result. Composition is still a little too symmetrical but overall effect is great.

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