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    First timer here.

    First time on CA that is.

    I've been at DA for five years, but I never really get much (or deep) critique while I posted my works there. I was hoping I could get something a little more constructive here.

    Currently, I consider this piece my best digital work to date. It's done entirely in illustrator, based off my own sketch. There are already a few quirks that I am aware of, but it would be nice to get critique from multiple points of view.

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    Simply put? The overall anatomy is horribly twisted. Her arms wouldn't connect with her shoulders like that, and the torso is...odd.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Falchion View Post
    Simply put? The overall anatomy is horribly twisted. Her arms wouldn't connect with her shoulders like that, and the torso is...odd.
    Could you be more specific please?

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    The basics are there ! the lighting is a bit samey to me, esp. around areas where it could be hotter (like near the flame).
    I think right now besides the same 'study anatomy moar' parroting, specifically you might want to study how the skeletal system lies underneath the muscles. The arm looks like its about to float off because of this muscle placement.

    this is just a surface reference.
    http://cheapercosmeticsurgeryabroad....%20Surgery.jpg

    but you should really go to posemaniacs.com and other anatomy sites to really see whats going down underneath.

    i do think the background overall works for the most part - dark, medium, then light with a bit of atmospherics.

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    Quote Originally Posted by AestheticMachine View Post
    The basics are there ! the lighting is a bit samey to me, esp. around areas where it could be hotter (like near the flame).
    I think right now besides the same 'study anatomy moar' parroting, specifically you might want to study how the skeletal system lies underneath the muscles. The arm looks like its about to float off because of this muscle placement.

    this is just a surface reference.
    http://cheapercosmeticsurgeryabroad....%20Surgery.jpg

    but you should really go to posemaniacs.com and other anatomy sites to really see whats going down underneath.

    i do think the background overall works for the most part - dark, medium, then light with a bit of atmospherics.
    Made some changes to the arm now, also made several lighting changes.
    Also, thanks a lot for telling me about that posemaniacs.com. That will really be useful.

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    While there are little things in the picture that bother me, the main thing that sticks out to me are the arms. They just seem kind of stiff and twisted.

    I've edited your picture a bit to show you what I mean. The left is the original, the right is the edits.
    First timer here.

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