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    Composition help on mars project, critique as much as you can

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    Hey guys and gals!
    hoping I can get some help with this illustration. It's a futuristic themed painting for my general illustration class, but these are just comps that I scanned in (terrible scans, sorry). It was suggested to me that the two color comps be combined somehow so I tried sketching that out. Let me just say a few things- this is going to be an 18x24 acrylic painting, and I probably won't have the means or time to update. I'd mainly want advice for the overall composition before I start actually painting. These are only rough sketches. Also, the guidelines are that there must be at least 3 figures. also, it will be an analogous palette with complimentary accents.
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    The attachment manager appears to be bugged today. I can't see any attached images, you will have to use an image hosting site such as ImageShack or TinyPic.

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    ok, that was unlucky. looks like now I'll be one of the few threads where the images are visible =D

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    lol, I go through the trouble of re-uploading everything exactly when the system decided to work again. That was fun.

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    These look good--very cool in a retro world-of-tomorrow kind of way. I like the color on the colored ones very much.

    The one thing I'd suggest is: never crop the figure or draw it off the frame unless you have a reason for doing so. If you must crop, do it at the bust or waist...when you crop a figure at the ankle it makes the composition look amateurish.

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    thanks for the reply! I was looking at some of Sid Mead's work, which sorta inspired the style. I am fixing the ankle cut composition, which is why I switched it up in the two pencil sketches. I'm still not sure which one of them looks better though.

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    I think it would be cool if the satillites you have were a little more looming, like they were enormous. SO maybe just part of one that was in orbit, closer than the others. Just a thought, neat concepts though. Will you post the finished work here?

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    Thats a great suggestion klaw, I think I'll implement it. I will try to post the final when I'm done.

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    well, it's been a while, but now i'm on spring break and I got a chance to take a picture and upload progress. school has been crazy, but I guess now i have some time to finish this. I am aware that there are a few anatomical errors on the figures, but there isn't much that I can do now. This is my first time doing a painting this size in acrylics (or any size for that matter, I don't paint much traditionally) critique away, and I hope I can fix a few things. Also, there is glare from the photo on the back of the nearest figure, ignore that, and it also came out a lot more saturated than it actually is.

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    I wouldn't want to be anywhere close to that satellite if it gets caught in the gravitational force of the planet.

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    It's really cool to see the progress on this. Thanks for sharing with us!

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