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    Need feedback...

    I've pretty much exhausted personal critique with this piece so I need feedback from a fresh perspective. It may look a little stylized and static but that was sort of the idea. Besides that please let me know how I can improve the piece.

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    I think that the vertical lines/shadows of black on either side of the girls is kind of distracting. The girls look a little sweaty to me.

    And here's my sketchbook. Help me out with some c&c?
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    Worked on the black lines. Anything else?

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    You may want to desaturate, darken, and/or tone down the texture on the walls, because they're drawing way too much attention away from the figures.

    "Everything has its beauty, but not everyone sees it" -- Confucius

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    Your bugs and foreground women-things are all on the same plane, that is, the bugs look like they should be further back in the "room" and the mirror-like-portal-object is also too far forward.

    You can:

    A. blur those items ever so slightly to give it a depth of field, or add a grey-blue tint to show some "atmosphere" in the room.
    B. blur the bugs, loose the mirror-thing shadow and give it a cast shadow between the women-things to show it is floating between them.
    C. add a stronger light source to give more depth and volume and do A or B

    OR....

    I know you wanted a static feel, trying to go for a stylized artsy design and whatnot, but static can verge on boring if the composition doesn't move your eye through the piece.
    Check out this image and feel your eyes move through it. even though the "action" is static. http://www.juxtapoz.com/Gallery/imag...1337&type=orig

    Hope it helps.

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