Any thoughts or impressions?
 
View testimonialsView Artwork
Results 1 to 6 of 6
  1. #1
    Join Date
    May 2009
    Location
    New York, NY
    Posts
    413
    Thanks
    5
    Thanked 72 Times in 59 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0

    Any thoughts or impressions?

    The purpose of this rough layout is mostly to illustrate design elements, but any crits concerning composition, color balance, etc, would be helpful. I tend to get so caught up in explaining design content that I lose track of the more artistic qualities of the illustration itself.

    Attached Images Attached Images  
    Just another old dog learning new tricks.
    My sketchbook
    http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...d.php?t=158092
    My website
    http://www.drawhaus.com
    My environment concepts thread in the entertainment design section
    http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...d.php?t=180968

    artwork for "the guard", a webcomic that I am illustrating
    http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...94#post3025594
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote


  2. Hide this ad by registering as a member
  3. #2
    Join Date
    Jul 2009
    Location
    Here, for the moment.
    Posts
    27
    Thanks
    7
    Thanked 7 Times in 6 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0
    I like the style, the technical execution. Well done. However, it really seems to lack focus and balance. All the parts seem to be having a conversation with themselves and are oblivious to the rest of the picture. The direction of the picture seems to be meandering aimlessly.

    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote

  4. #3
    Join Date
    Nov 2003
    Posts
    1,924
    Thanks
    54
    Thanked 825 Times in 678 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0
    Looks good!

    The rendering is solid, but the overall design feels a bit...noncommital to me. There's a sort of an "absence of emotion" in the piece that I think jesaisrien seems to have been commenting on. If it were me, I'd consider this a sketch and do two things:

    1) Tighten down the architecture as much as possible, probably by modeling all the buildings in 3D. That might give the piece a certain DiChirico-esque empty precision which I think would help a lot.

    2) Use some kind of global illumination or colored lighting to set the mood of the scene a bit more. The light you have now is acceptable, but feels a bit undramatic.

    Hope that helps. (FYI: I checked out your website and your work is awesome!)

    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote

  5. #4
    Join Date
    Jun 2007
    Location
    charlotte, nc
    Posts
    1,281
    Thanks
    58
    Thanked 275 Times in 249 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0
    The isle takes my eye to the back of your images but your focal point seems to be that tall building with a statue inside which is executed nicely and light is awesome. I would place that building at the end of the isle to have more of a flow and put unimportant buildings around.

    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote

  6. The Following User Says Thank You to DAMJAN For This Useful Post:


  7. #5
    Join Date
    May 2005
    Posts
    739
    Thanks
    46
    Thanked 223 Times in 163 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0
    The lighting on the man building is blown out.

    Since it's the focus of the pic, you could put the other areas in shadow to shift the eye up to the man in the O. Make it like one big shaft of light is coming down onto the dude and the rest of the cityscape is overcast.

    BTW that Frankenotter is one scary plane!

    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote

  8. #6
    Join Date
    May 2009
    Location
    New York, NY
    Posts
    413
    Thanks
    5
    Thanked 72 Times in 59 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0
    Thanks for the feedback, everyone. Youv'e confirmed my suspicions that the composition was kind of a shotgun blast, with no focus. Moving the building to the end of the walkway is a great idea. I'll try that one for sure. Though it was just a layout, I'll probably end up starting over rather than beating a dead horse.

    I've jumped out of the Franken-Otter many times, and it's actually a great plane. It gets up to 14,500 feet in about 12 minutes.

    Just another old dog learning new tricks.
    My sketchbook
    http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...d.php?t=158092
    My website
    http://www.drawhaus.com
    My environment concepts thread in the entertainment design section
    http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...d.php?t=180968

    artwork for "the guard", a webcomic that I am illustrating
    http://www.conceptart.org/forums/sho...94#post3025594
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote

Members who have read this thread: 0

There are no members to list at the moment.

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •  
  • 424,149 Artists
  • 3,599,276 Artist Posts
  • 32,941 Sketchbooks
  • 54 New Art Jobs
Art Workshop Discount Inside
Register

Developed Actively by vBSocial.com
The Art Department
SpringOfSea's Sketchbook