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January 1st, 2010 #1
Derpbook (please critique!)
Yay, sketchbook. Please critique (I NEED IT!!)
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Howdy! Okay, so, I really liked the shading in these pictures. The muscle tone is also very well drawn but there's just a couple things that seem off with the anatomy. In both of the pictures, the necks seem just a bit too long and the muscles and tendons don't really seem to flow as well as they should. In the top one, the trapezius is a little lopsided. It seems to bulge out just a little. Same with the area bellow the shoulders. The right forearm has a tiny unnatural curve to it. The buttox looks a little too low...as far as where the cleavage starts. Lastly, the legs are a little too thick for how thin the arms are. Int the second picture, her chin looks a little smashed, but that might just be her face type. The collar bone doesn't really round off in the middle, it's just draped across the front of her. The muscle between her neck and shoulder blade is a bit too big. her upper arm also curves in an unnatural way. Her torso feels a little too long...either that or her breasts are to high up. I realize she's pushing up on them with her forearms, but it looks a little confusing. lastly, the bulge on her wrist is a bit to big. Great job on the hands though. they look great.
I also realize that I am neither studying art nor a professional artist, but I would still like to voice my opinion. Sorry if it sounds too nitpicky coming from me. ^^;
P.S. Sorry it's so long...
January 1st, 2010 #3
Wow, uh, thanks! *tries to process*
...I'll put that into consideration. XD
January 2nd, 2010 #4
January 2nd, 2010 #5
Here's another one~
November 2nd, 2011 #6
So it's been like forever since I last posted on here...
I've been too intimidated, even though I've posted in the past. But basically, Deviantart has really pissed me off because of how everyone just gives asspats and never critiques ANYTHING, so I'm just like screw it I'll update my sketchbook and let people destroy me, because I seriously need to get better. Haha.
I'll post some studies and gesture drawing things later, these just happen to already be on my computer
Post-apocalypic nurse... lady...
There she is again!!!
some unfinished drawing... not sure where it ended up...
Ah! she's back!
lame picture of someone with a broken spine apperantly.
I drew this because I was mad at someone. SO MATURE, GUYS. It was better than punching them, though.
November 2nd, 2011 #7
Okay, I scanned some of the studies.
I darkened them a little.
ALSO, can anyone tell me how I can change my thread's thumbnail? I can't figure this stuff out... :/
Obligatory demon-lady picture.
November 2nd, 2011 #8
I like your cross hatching, it really adds a unique look to your work. Keep at it, looking forward to seeing more from you.
Oh about the thumbnail, I put one picture in my first post ensuring it was the one that showed up on the forum listing... I dunno if you can choose between multiple pics...
“Only those who attempt the absurd…will achieve the impossible.”
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November 2nd, 2011 #9
November 2nd, 2011 #10
You're using the attachment manager right? upload the picture you want as your new thumbnail to post #1 and then click on the paperclip icon. It'll show a list of the uploaded pictures, attach the one you want. You might have to delete the other pictures from your post, just put them up on post #2 if you want.
I'm liking the hatching too, it'll be nice to see where your style goes. Really nice marker stuff too.
It looks to me like your figure studies are focusing too much on the 2D shape and contours of the figures, try to focus on the mass and anatomy. Visualizing the rib cage and pelvis as solid blocks and building up the drawing from them is a nice way to start. You might want to try some ecorche drawings, just draw what you think the muscles and bone would look like under the skin. Are you using any anatomy books or resources? Loomis, Michael Hampton's, or Glen Vilppu's figure drawing books would be good resources if you're looking.
Best of luck, keep posting!
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November 3rd, 2011 #11
THANK YOU for the comments!!!
@Vertical: yeah, for sure, I definitely have difficulties with those things... and as far as books go, I have some Loomis books as pdf's on this computer... I've kinda read them.... but I mostly look at the pictures... :/ haha
Also, yeah, I use the manager. I just shoved one of my doodles in the first post so it'll show up as the thumbnail
Anyway, I did some more studies and tried to give them more mass and imagine blocks like you said!! I think I'm starting to grasp it but there's definitely more work that needs to be done...
This one is just an unrelated study.. I think I drew it before the ones above:
These ones weren't from observation...
November 3rd, 2011 #12
I forgot to add these ones too!!
I was doodling... blehh -_-
more doodles... not paying attention to whatever class I was in...
On an unrelated note, here is a space girl and a druid-type lady.
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November 5th, 2011 #13
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November 6th, 2011 #14
And ugh I know seriously... I have this weird issue with necks.... :/
so yeah I've been pretty lazy but here's a watercolor..
I really have to get over this obsession with the nurse lady...
I will get back to studies in my next update for sure >.<
November 9th, 2011 #15
did like 3 more but I can't find them at all for some reason. ugh
November 12th, 2011 #16
figured I would post some random doodles too...
I draw this little character of myself... yeah... HORNED RABBIT
I also like to draw her as a monster. BWAH!!
The little cat guy is unrelated.. haha
November 12th, 2011 #17
Also did some more serious things too.. Most of these are from imagination
I actually did this a long time ago.. I plan to color it but I want to save the lineart... I LIKE HER EYEBROWS!!
Also did this a long time ago... it's... blehhh.
It's kinda cute I guess...
sketching in marker is very intimidating! @_@
Also, loomis thingies:
A little perspective doodle I did during some random class... this is also pretty old...
November 15th, 2011 #18
November 17th, 2011 #19
Bump post pretty much...
please comment and critique... I could really use it...
old old pictures from imagination
November 17th, 2011 #20
more old works
November 18th, 2011 #21
Hey there. I like the direction you're going, you seem to be on a good path.
You've already made one of the best choices of your potential career (IMO) by involving yourself in conceptart.org. Complacency is the womb of mediocrity as Jason Manley said it, and hopefully CA can keep you hungry and motivated. Even though as the membership grows the ratio of professionals per user goes down, it's still one of the most useful online resources for a budding artist.
Your studies look nice, keep doing those! I was never really that into studies, and my progress has been slow because of it. They can really speed up your artistic growth (as I have seen them do for others). I don't know how much older the pictures you say are "old" are, but it seems to me that you've shown definite improvement since then. Actually I especially like the last picture in post #18, despite the anatomy being worse than many of your other drawings, it reminds me of my own work from not too long ago. I really enjoy the attitude and style in it.
May I suggest you try to get into a SSG (Sketchbook Support Group)? Essentially you band together with other CA.orgians to visit each other's sketchbooks and leave crits on a regular basis. It can be a more reliable way of getting crits, plus you get to know other artists. There is strength in numbers. There's a thread for it here: http://conceptart.org/forums/showthr...=42234&page=46
Originally Posted by Shizmoo
Good luck and have fun
Last edited by Hai; November 18th, 2011 at 03:05 PM.
November 18th, 2011 #22
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November 19th, 2011 #23
@Hai: THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR COMMENTING!!! haha
I was starting to feel really lonely here!
Yeah, I will do more studies for sure :3 I'll probably update again later today with some. And thanks about that picture!
About the Sketchbook group, that sounds like a good idea! I am pretty timid when it comes to critiquing other people, though... I just don't think I really am at the point where I know what I'm talking about... lol
@rumpenstiltzkin: THANK YOU TOO!!!!
November 19th, 2011 #24
November 19th, 2011 #25
@ChrisKlungerbo: THANK YOU!!! I'm really glad you decided to comment again!
As for my update, I've just got some sketches from imagination...
I have several complaints about these, but I was getting tired of trying to fix them (sooo much erasing...) that I'll just dump 'em here haha
^This one doesn't bother me AS much as the others, primarily because this is a WIP that I plan to do more with in the future when I get a tablet again...
^Yeah.. I don't have much to say about this one. I tilted it a little because I felt it had some balance issues, not sure if it still looks unbalanced really
^THIS ONE. THIS ONE CAUSED ME SO MANY PROBLEMS. It still looks really conflicted but I just got too sick or reworking it. My main issue is that it looks as though her feet are on a different plane from her upper half, so it makes that area look really flat (including the wings)
I just... bleeehhhh
^oh no!!! I was mostly just doing this as a gesture drawing that I started with a loomis skeleton... but I am still unhappy about her lower half... :/
^Lol yeah. I just figured I'd leave this here...
November 20th, 2011 #26
In a SSG setting, you shouldn't feel bad if you can't critique all the time. The group is also about encouragement. So you all encourage each other, say what you like about a picture if that's easier than pointing out what's wrong, and every once in a while you might see something you can critique, and it's like a bonus. As time passes, you'll get better, and you'll be able to critique more. One thing that you should always keep in mind is that CA.org is a place where people come to get better, and to do that they need critique. They expect it. If you find something to point out, don't be afraid to do that, no matter how much better than you they are - 'cause even if they are, they still might have overlooked it.
The important thing is to contribute your critiques in a friendly, non-aggressive way. People will listen to you if you're friendly, and might ignore you if you piss them off. On CA.org, people will take critique gracefully, so long as you deliver it gracefully (and if they don't, it's their problem, not yours). Sometimes you might get a bad reaction to your crit, but don't let that deter you. You have to filter for yourself what you pay attention to and what you ignore, so let the good experiences encourage you and don't let the bad drag you down (or even use them to motivate yourself to do better). The same goes for critiques on your own work. You have to decide for yourself what crits you listen to, and what crits you don't agree with.
Alright, this is getting long so I'll just say one more thing. What comes around, goes around. This is so true for CA.org. If you're an active member of the community, you visit other people's sketchbooks, you leave critiques and contribute - I promise you that will come back to you in a good way.
Sorry for the wall of text, I think I'm done now I'll just recap with: Don't be afraid to critique if you have a legitimate complaint about a work - people expect it. And when you do choose to say something, say it in a way that you'd want others to say it when critiquing your work.
December 25th, 2011 #27
Man, thanks Hai for the thoughtful responses!
I haven't been on in a long time! D:> I've been so busy with Thanksgiving, finals, and Christmas...
I FINALLY got a new tablet! I havent done digital art in almost a year because my other one broke... so here is a drawing I did (it's a version of the other rough sketch I posted a while before in the previous post) it's a work in progress right now, but I just had to post something because I've been gone for so long...
man this really makes me realize how little I know about colors... lol
edit: uploaded the one without the ugly palette there
also, im not gonna keep her face that way, it just looks dumb because I wanted a placeholder there before i work on it more haha
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December 26th, 2011 #28
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December 27th, 2011 #29
Thanks for the link, JFierce!
Here's an update on the picture:
December 28th, 2011 #30
Here's a creature sketch from today:
Oh, and my current WIP:
It's fan art of Riven from League of Legends. She's pretty coo'
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