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    Derpbook (please critique!)

    Yay, sketchbook. Please critique (I NEED IT!!)

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    Howdy! Okay, so, I really liked the shading in these pictures. The muscle tone is also very well drawn but there's just a couple things that seem off with the anatomy. In both of the pictures, the necks seem just a bit too long and the muscles and tendons don't really seem to flow as well as they should. In the top one, the trapezius is a little lopsided. It seems to bulge out just a little. Same with the area bellow the shoulders. The right forearm has a tiny unnatural curve to it. The buttox looks a little too low...as far as where the cleavage starts. Lastly, the legs are a little too thick for how thin the arms are. Int the second picture, her chin looks a little smashed, but that might just be her face type. The collar bone doesn't really round off in the middle, it's just draped across the front of her. The muscle between her neck and shoulder blade is a bit too big. her upper arm also curves in an unnatural way. Her torso feels a little too long...either that or her breasts are to high up. I realize she's pushing up on them with her forearms, but it looks a little confusing. lastly, the bulge on her wrist is a bit to big. Great job on the hands though. they look great.

    I also realize that I am neither studying art nor a professional artist, but I would still like to voice my opinion. Sorry if it sounds too nitpicky coming from me. ^^;

    P.S. Sorry it's so long...
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    Wow, uh, thanks! *tries to process*
    ...I'll put that into consideration. XD
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    nice start!
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    Thanks, struve!

    Here's another one~
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    Dude.

    So it's been like forever since I last posted on here...
    I've been too intimidated, even though I've posted in the past. But basically, Deviantart has really pissed me off because of how everyone just gives asspats and never critiques ANYTHING, so I'm just like screw it I'll update my sketchbook and let people destroy me, because I seriously need to get better. Haha.
    I'll post some studies and gesture drawing things later, these just happen to already be on my computer

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    Post-apocalypic nurse... lady...
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    There she is again!!!
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    some unfinished drawing... not sure where it ended up...
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    Ah! she's back!
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    lame picture of someone with a broken spine apperantly.
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    I drew this because I was mad at someone. SO MATURE, GUYS. It was better than punching them, though.
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    Okay, I scanned some of the studies.
    I darkened them a little.

    ALSO, can anyone tell me how I can change my thread's thumbnail? I can't figure this stuff out... :/

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    I like your cross hatching, it really adds a unique look to your work. Keep at it, looking forward to seeing more from you.

    Oh about the thumbnail, I put one picture in my first post ensuring it was the one that showed up on the forum listing... I dunno if you can choose between multiple pics...
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    Looking good! Keep up the studies
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    You're using the attachment manager right? upload the picture you want as your new thumbnail to post #1 and then click on the paperclip icon. It'll show a list of the uploaded pictures, attach the one you want. You might have to delete the other pictures from your post, just put them up on post #2 if you want.

    I'm liking the hatching too, it'll be nice to see where your style goes. Really nice marker stuff too.
    It looks to me like your figure studies are focusing too much on the 2D shape and contours of the figures, try to focus on the mass and anatomy. Visualizing the rib cage and pelvis as solid blocks and building up the drawing from them is a nice way to start. You might want to try some ecorche drawings, just draw what you think the muscles and bone would look like under the skin. Are you using any anatomy books or resources? Loomis, Michael Hampton's, or Glen Vilppu's figure drawing books would be good resources if you're looking.
    Best of luck, keep posting!
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    THANK YOU for the comments!!!
    @Vertical: yeah, for sure, I definitely have difficulties with those things... and as far as books go, I have some Loomis books as pdf's on this computer... I've kinda read them.... but I mostly look at the pictures... :/ haha

    Also, yeah, I use the manager. I just shoved one of my doodles in the first post so it'll show up as the thumbnail

    Anyway, I did some more studies and tried to give them more mass and imagine blocks like you said!! I think I'm starting to grasp it but there's definitely more work that needs to be done...
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    This one is just an unrelated study.. I think I drew it before the ones above:
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    These ones weren't from observation...
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    I forgot to add these ones too!!

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    I was doodling... blehh -_-

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    more doodles... not paying attention to whatever class I was in...

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    On an unrelated note, here is a space girl and a druid-type lady.
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    Heey! =) Your work improved quite a bit in your last post, think you have worked on your drawings =) Think maybe necks are jus a bit long in your last girlies =) Hope you don't mind that feedback and it helps =) Good luck with your next study =)
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