Raoul I tinkered a bit with your version. I think this one is a bit more dynamic and the awesome legs really seem to be running in this position. I rotated the torso as well to imply movement and I made the snake longer so that it is more readable. The pentacles on the snake were very distracting to me, so I got rid of them. What were you trying to convey with them? I hope you don't mind me changing it up a bit and please tell me any elements you dislike so that I can start painting soon.
I was thinking a wet street scenario for the background, and fog of course to and maybe even some fumes coming form a sewer hole.
How are the Lovers coming along?