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    W.I.P. The Oni is fallen; C&C are welcome

    Hi mates, i decided that i should work and improve my speed when drawing, and especially the values choosing, so yesterday started a painting to practice both.

    After more or less 4 hours of work, its not looking bad, but would like some help from you mates, to see if the work is going the right way.

    heres the pic, i will post more updates =)

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    The composition is a bit dodgy, I can't see what they're doing. I can't see anything wrong with anatomy at a first glance. Are they fighting together, eachother?

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    The picture itself is rather nice - good quality shading and detailing. The arm of the Samurai looks a bit off - check the anatomy. Otherwise the most obvious problem is the composition - there seems to be little or no evidence the two are actually fighting without seriously considering it - they look allied, rather than conflicting. Try and reposition them and make their battle more obvious and striking.
    Oh, and if you intended to make the woman appear Asian - try looking up some reference pictures - she looks like she is squinting.
    Otherwise - plenty of potential. Good work

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    Well, they are not fighting, the fight is over, the samurai is deep breathing, tired, after the battle, the oni is dying before he dies. In subsequent actualizations will draw multiple injuries and so, to enhance the effect of the battle over, anyways ill try to improve his arm and face, yes, she should look asian=)
    Any more suggestion?

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    New update:

    8 hours of work. i think its finished by now.

    And here is it! What do you think mates???

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    Her right leg. The thigh that's shown is long. Longer than Longcat, as a matter of fact.

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    While the picture makes sense with the explanation you provided us with, remember the majority of those who view the painting wont have that, and will view it out of context. Try and make it more obvious. You posted here for crits - it doesnt seem as if you took anything anyone said in, which is sad, because you have a great potential picture on your hands.

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    I don't feel that the image effectively represents the story. The Girl looks like she just stabbed something on the ground, and the beast looks like it is about to turn around and maul her. I think some subtle changes could fix that. Try working on the beasts expression, like he is very weak and have his eyes look sleepy. You could adjust the girls face a bit so that her eyes are sort of looking behind her, like if someone is looking peripherally.

    Her thigh does seem too long, and i think you have to make her a little more relaxed. I'd suggest bringing the shoulder on the right down a little.

    The thigh and sword need to be sharpened up, they look blurry in areas. And I'm not a big fan of the textures you used on the beasts fur, a lot of his body doesn't look like it has any form. Try creating a more dynamic lighting scheme on him. I am not getting the sense that you have a real light source in mind, the highlights are all over the place.

    One last thing is that where the hair on the girl meets her forehead looks really odd, like the hair isn't attached to the scalp but it just starts out of nowhere. Hope this helps, good luck!

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    Hey Avvatar, thanks a lot for your C&C, it will help me a lot qith future works ( im kind of worried with this one, i´m hating it now ^^ and will start to pactice on some bases and new works )
    Thanks another time !

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