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    Question [critic request] Pfil, profile

    Hi everyone

    Here's a drawing of Pfil, a H manga character, I did some weeks ago...

    I'm actually changing style recently, I was more in the realism like drawings, and I'm going more into the manga style now...

    I wanted some feedback and critics about this drawing, what do you think about it ? overall, design, rendering and such...

    Thanks in advance

    Last edited by kamui_kun; September 26th, 2011 at 09:10 AM.
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    Your perspective's all off. Her face is a straight-out profile, but we can see her chesty-bits from a bit of an overhead angle. And I'm leaving the animu-hatery to everyone else.

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    The colours are good, nice tones variation expecially on the flesh
    the face profile maybe could be a bit more gentle in my view, it seems to make the nose slightly big as it is now. I guess a shorter and rounder curve on the upper part of the nose could make a better effect, but I'm not really into thatkind of style.

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    Thanks for your replies

    @Falchion:
    Well she could be turning her head to her right... maybe T.T
    OK the perspective is off, but I though that in manga design we could cheat a little with these kind of stuff for a more simple approach... I'm wrong it seems

    @Kerion:
    I see your point, the nose is sticking out too much, I'll try to take that in consideration next time

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    btw, if you would rate this drawing, on a scale of 5 (5 for perfect, 3 for so so, and 0 for an absolute c***), what would you give ?

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    I think that her torso should be at a different angle and that her shoulder is a bit lumpy. You might want to work on your arms.

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    @FalyneVarger:
    It's true that the lower part of the drawing looks a bit strange, maybe because I didn't put much attention to that part (its almost identical to the initial quick sketch...)

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