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    ok sorry. Its just that when I saw your image it looked just like hers. So I thought I might give you this attachment to get some ideas from... ...Perhaps you have already got this image for reference.
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    I gotta disagree with you boys ...... her original figure is perfect for the pose and her mid-section is just as it should be. When putting the shoulders back it thrusts out her chest, raising her rib cage ... thus the exageration. This is why her stomack would appear flattened in this way. I believe her stance represents authority and confidence. To change it in any way would deminish her role as Valkyrie.
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    I'm not sure you have made any progress with that last update Agathe.

    You have started to add detail without addressing some of the main problems.

    In you latest update she looks like she's looks off balance and is about to tip over to her right side.

    Shoulders are too narrow, especially for a warrior woman.

    If anything, you should go back to the original pose. Although the torso and legs don't seem to connect well in that pose.
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    I agree totally with Razorleaf. If you feel like to exaggerate, then please do so. Just keep in mind certain rules like the gravity. In your latest post, the figure seems like moving to the left (her right), which is okay, but if you want her to pose as a leader, i would go with the original pose.

    I think you can go and finish the tone, it still lack some deep-mid, mid-light and highlight
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    If you think you're so perfect, why are you wasting our time? Good luck to you.
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    Wow! That is a bit harsh don't you think? Rein it in dashinvaine, yours is not the only opinion here. And for the record Agathe did not waste my time, I actually like this piece.
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    Dashinvaine if im wasting 'your' time, skip the thread mate and thats all you have to do. i am actualy supprised by how overreactive and childish that was for you to say that. perfection is my aim i never think that i am perfect otherwise i wouldnt ask for critique and youve got to accept that im not going to sit here and agree with everything you say.

    apart from dash thanks to everyone else for your critique i found it very helpfull but i think ill go study some decent reference and no longer post anymore updates, things are just getting to heated.
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    ah dont go! lol
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    Firstly I would like to say her face is gorgeous. The work you have put into sculpting her eye down to her cheek and jawline is great.

    It seems you have already gotten some advice on things like anatomy, so all I can really offer is I would love to see the great details you've put into her face continued into the other parts of her body.
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    i wanted to dig it up again. its still a wip any suggestions/ideas would be nice.
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    I think you should finish it!!! It looks great! i love how you did the feathers.
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    I'm too late to the party to give you anything useful on pose. What I'm seeing about it is that the ribcage feels too far shifted back. Not rotated back, the rotation is fine. It feels like it's rotated and shifted back. I think that's what makes the pose feel awkward to me. That shift throws her weight back and messes with her centerline, making her feel tippy. In addition, her pelvis and legs seem to have an issue to me. Her image left leg is taking her weight, but the hips don't cant/tilt to reflect this. That hip should be up with the straight leg supporting it, and her spine should curve to compensate, canting/tiliting the shoulders opposite.

    Again all of that way too damn late, so I apologize for noting it. Just what I saw. What I see that you can address are the following. Proportions seem off on the image right leg. I think that's because you originally had her up on toes, but then you dropped her feet. When you did you basically just extended her calves, which made them too long. Calves should be just short of thighs in length. Next under her image right shoulder, the armpit is dark void. It's too deep, specifically at that transition of pectoral to pit. Define her lat coming up to the arm in that shadow area with some lightening and reduce the contrast there a bit and I think it will fix it. The lines of the clavicles and of the sternomastoid muscles are too sharp. They look like pinched raises, not swells under skin. Contour on the top of the breast is coming off a little globular. That's a matter of taste of course but as it is they feel like implants. If that's what you want, good. If not, shave off some of the top curve, flattening it. This will make the breast appear to sag more, making it more natural. I think you have some nice definition of muscle going on in the image right arm. However, the biceps seems over done and the triceps seem non-existent. In that pose I'd expect to see some bulge from triceps on the back side top of the upper arm. Finally the face, you've got some nice rendering on the eye and lovely skin tone. What it lacks is emotion or personality. It's very doll like. It would be nice to see her looking at a definite place with intent. The slightly open mouth in that very default pose accents this kind of spacey look. She's carrying a weapon, that to me generally means threat. Maybe a lowering of the brows, a slight narrowing of the eyes. Tighten the lips perhaps and show a line of the the muscles of the jaw clenching in anger. All this would give some mood to her. Oh and as an aside, those feathers are very interestingly rendered. Very graphical. I like them.
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    baslack i found your critique very helpful and descriptive thank you! haha yeh i agree i could have used your critique much earlier. ill countinue more with this tomorrow
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