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Last edited by ilkerdal; December 2nd, 2009 at 11:05 AM.
..this is pretty cool
Start a sketchbook thread and post as much as you can, indicating that its creatures you draw and would like a critique.
I do think, under the chin is lost due to it being too dark and try to avoid using heavy, think black lines, as the structure of the beast is lost in this. Use some reptile references to help you out - dont copy, just get an idea of the structure, and use little bits here and there in your drawings...
Also, visit creaturespot.org, CA user davi started it, and he loves his creatures; look at Mike Corrieros work for dragons and stuff.....
And, keep at it!
thanks for advice molly, i trust you. i first looking creaturespot.org, really cool site.
i upraged this work. how is it now?
Really slick finish. But I think the original sketch could've been more dynamic, and not a perfect profile.
thanks mr. punch but what is perfect profile?
Last edited by ilkerdal; September 6th, 2009 at 11:34 PM.
no problem art4all, but its mouths like crocodile's mouth, and closed
Hmm, mind your references, a crocodile has such a mouth for a purpose, as most poisonous animals have their fragile fangs hidden away in their mouths for a purpose. I don't think that for a poisonous dragon, this particular mouth design works very well. The teeth are extremely sharp, despite the fact that they are always exposed to the elements, that doesn't really make your creature feel right, if you get me.
I also think you could push the shading a little bit more, as there is an extremely strong highlight right in front and somewhat above him, but the underside of his neck and most of the neck itself still appears to be in a similar light from somewhere else.
I like it's overall design though, and the greens suit him very well .
crocodile is my reference just for mouth, and this dragon's skin and auro is poisoned, and it very big dragon, it doesnt need teeth for poison, it has kinds of deadly poison magic (in my concept world, i am writing still my world's stories). and my references on this dragon ; snake, crocodile, iguana, comodo dragons, dinasourus. u are right about highlight and shadows. but i dont want realistic, i want to make my style, is that be problem for me? i will work that and i like your idea yes darks kills
By perfect profile (earlier written, not responded to) was, I believe, a reference to the angle you've chosen to paint your dragon. I'm only saying this because I agree with the critique, but for later paintings as it's a little late for such a comment at the moment.
Perfect profile is a "flat" side-view.
I'm feeling a good sense of form towards the top of his head near the neck (dragon spines), but his eye is completely lifeless to me. It doesn't feel like it's sitting properly in a socket, but rather feels a little pasted on.
As previously mentioned your darks are a little overpowering near the neck and bottom of the head. You've got some really nice lower valued modeling going on in the section between the eye and the teeth and I think you could probably to to add some of those same values and colors to the neck to round him out a lot more.
The light source also feels really artificial. I would ditch the "sunlight coming from the corner" feel immediately. It also makes it feel as though it is coming from off in the distance and in that case I feel most of what we see would be in shadow.
thanks bro. its nice to tell about the shadow under the neck, but as i told above my style is very different from reality. i created my style similar to the miniature painting which was seen in ottoman ages, therefore i am not going to pay attention to your advises about the tissue of the dragon, i regret to tell. but im thinking of doing something about the shadow.
I might suggest you at least see what you can do about saturating your blacks a bit, then. They don't contrast in a way that is pleasing to the eye when you have heavily saturated lights but very VERY low saturated blacks. Information not shown in the shadows is a personal thing that you choose to do, whether or not I agree with it, but I do feel there is more room for you to push this with your current style.
Keep up the good work.
thanks, yes i have to do something about the black(shadows neyi istersen)
i know that black kills colors
but its a habbit from charcoal
please qritique about last edit.
1. The highlights on the dragon's nose and forehead are lost. There is no contrast with the background, so they are not as effective as they could be.
2. Study this guy's gallery in DA. I'm doing a critique on one of his new pieces next week. http://yigitkoroglu.deviantart.com/