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    Composition

    Alright so after taking the composition class here I'm trying to put to work some the of the things that I've learned. Started this morning.

    Basically just looking for a second opinion on how it reads. Or if there's anything awkward that sticks out to you!

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    i want to see a more dramatic perspective, figure larger, building smaller, some other things going on in the midground. as it is the two major features here are parallel and about the same size.

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    The spire seems awkward to me, somehow... too tall? Too thick? And do you really intend for it to go out the top of the image?

    Also, the woman's arm is in a very awkward pose. Try doing that yourself and see.

    I like the color scheme.

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    Thanks so much for the input very good points.

    I did a quick re size to see if I could make it more dynamic. I also tried moving around the arm a bit but I think I should just redraw it from scratch.

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    Rules of thirds: Draw lines dividing your image into 3 equal parts vertically and horizontally. Where these lines intersect are the areas of greatest interest. As you can see, none of the major areas of your illustration are at a focus point.

    The major lines in your illustration (traced over in red) should also have something to do with the points of interest. 2 intersect NEAR but not quite ON the spire, making it look a little awkward. Another intersection almost occurs, but it's out of frame. In general, things should not almost be on the page. They should either definitely be in frame, or definitely out of frame.

    My second attachment is how I would redesign the picture. Now the face, hand, and temple are all at focus points. The far hill follows the girl's line of sight to the temple. The far hill and the middle hill intersect at the temple.

    Also, be sure that the areas with the greatest contrast in color and value are the areas you want the viewer's eye to gravitate to.

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