I still just a Juvenille Delinquent...
Direct impact on the eyes- yes, but I dont think this image is done. If you posted this in the Critique Forum, you would've recieved some much needed advice.
There are anatomical issues with the character, colour and lighting issues with the background, and overall image. The Characters torso, is at an off angle, to its bottom half; the trousers/pants are rather large- I take it, you were trying to make them baggie?
-the white light behind your character, doesn't sit well and looks unsure; also, the light overall is the same brightness and color, which, doesnt separate the foreground and background; this also goes for the breath mist, its too dense;
-The background; Some varying coloured light, imagery, defining edges (eg: shop signs, traffic lights, street lamps etc) would give effect that this background is vibrant city;
-the texturing on the pants is rather random, and doesnt carry on through the character, or the rest of the image..
You need to define your light sources, and each indiviual light sources strengths and directions. Not all light is going to be as bright as you made it -I understand the effect you are trying to gain - but what you have done has made your painting difficult to read. This image also lacks colour, and at night, there would be some colour seen.
The background is kinda vague. I know there are buildings there, but, the space separating the character and background is confusing, and unsure.
Apologise, if this is crit is harsh, but, I think you could work on this some more, if not just to finish your image, but also, for your own experience.
More studying of human anatomy and how cloth sits on the figure would help you, and also, some colour & light knowledge. Get yourself some photographic references and use them to help guide you to what you want to portrait. Sketch out your painting, and experiment with colour and light.
My two pennies,
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