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    Unhappy Pinched, flat look :(

    I'm going to include the process images because what I'm really interested in are DRAW OVERS or whatever you want to call it demonstrating what changes would make her face look better.

    Please note that I realize a 3/4 image would have been more interesting but this was all originally just for messing with helm designs...


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    Now I feel a little silly :x referencing looks much better. I should really print out some stuff to work with....

    anyway ty for the advice, if you have more please feel free to post it

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    you forgot to give her nostrils and her iris is way too small

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    Also the jaw should have some curve to it and the base of the nose doesn't come in at a sharp angle like that.

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    Hello

    Study the profile of a human. Right now the perspective of the facial features are all off.

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    Hello

    Study the profile of a human. Right now the perspective of the facial features are all off.

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    overpaint tiem..
    don't guess but use references and read up the Loomis books.. anatomy studies are helpful too
    *rolls back to drawing*

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    Last edited by Kiera; July 9th, 2009 at 11:26 AM.
    I just took a break to post this.
    But sometimes I also draw stuff
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    Nice crit and overpaint kiera. I agree 100%


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    I guess at the end of the day I really just need to do a lot more reference work.

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    The neck is too elongated to be natural.

    Some areas need shading, such as around the eyes, since the eyes are located in a hollow part of the skull, and on the sides of the nose.

    Also, the blood is in globs and doesn't really make a lot of sense. Try messing with the opacity in certain places (especially the edges, where the blood and the clean skin meet) and have it follow the form rather than making it round. Right now, it looks like objects floating around by the face. Around the cut, the skin should swollen and red from being ripped open.

    There's lots of stock on deviantArt showing blood, but here's one I'll link you to:
    http://glamourousacid-stock.devianta...shion-65099141

    Hope this helps you out

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    stop drawing manga style, get some hwo to draw books and start practicing, draw from life a lot, learn human anatomy. Withsome practive you light get neat results, such as the pic Kiera posted, that looks correct to me.

    Never use style as excuse for mistakes. no matter what comic style, japanese, us or whatever, it is all based on realist amd certain proportions and rules must always apply without exceptions.stop drawing manga style, get some how to draw books and start practicing, draw from life a lot, learn human anatomy. With some practice you light get neat results, such as the pic Kiera posted, that looks correct to me.

    Never use style as excuse for mistakes. no matter what comic style, japanese, us or whatever, it is all based on realist and certain proportions and rules must always apply without exceptions.

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    I cant agree with you at all on that :/

    even realists have different styles.

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