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    Would like some criticisms on that piece. Thank you very much.

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    nice work, keep going.

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    With the brush you're using the edges of the clouds look like they're made of threads, which really gets in the way of them looking like clouds. You need to fix that.

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    The dome/building seems to be lopsided, like it's tipping to the bottom left corner.

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    I think the perspective is slightly off to. I believe with the angle you are looking down on the dome the horizon should be lifted up quite a large amount. There is also allot of empty space in the canvas. Do you plan on adding more buildings ?

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    First thing I thought was 'where's that guy gonna park?' cause I don't see a landing pad or area for him to touch down and walk in to meet his fellows (and he's late, to boot) As for the tower, the perspective is wonky as far as how the supporting struts are drawn and how their shadows fall inside the dome. If you also push the details and put some shine on the windows, it'll start looking sharp! The clouds in the upper half look great--so does the sunset and how the color reflects off the cloud's undersides. I'm not so sure I like the clouds in the foreground 'hiding' the tower's columns though. It makes me think of people drawing hands in pockets to avoid drawing them outright.

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    This is what ive been able to do so far. Thank you for your helpful criticisms. I appreciate.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Maridius View Post
    First thing I thought was 'where's that guy gonna park?' cause I don't see a landing pad or area for him to touch down and walk in to meet his fellows (and he's late, to boot) As for the tower, the perspective is wonky as far as how the supporting struts are drawn and how their shadows fall inside the dome. If you also push the details and put some shine on the windows, it'll start looking sharp! The clouds in the upper half look great--so does the sunset and how the color reflects off the cloud's undersides. I'm not so sure I like the clouds in the foreground 'hiding' the tower's columns though. It makes me think of people drawing hands in pockets to avoid drawing them outright.
    The dome is a floating dome so there is actually no column to it. And i painted the whole thing before painting the clouds over it. I understand what you mean by drawing hands in pockets. It does look that way. So I tried to show a little bit of the bottom side of it. Not quite sure if its helping. I'll have to fix that more. Thanks

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