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    The Guardian

    I started this painting not knowing where it was going. I ended up with this image. Im sure ive got a lot more to work on. Thank you for your criticisms.
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    The Guardian

    I thought the edges were too sharp on the glacier in the background (left)
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    Good start on this. Best advice I can think of for now if to look up references of similar scenes so you can figure out what kind of stuff to put, how to play with the color some more to make it pop. And how to make it seem less empty. Try setting the fisherman off to the side, he's dead center and that's a bit boring in a composition. Finally, it seems like this is a moonlit scene, but you're treating the moon like it's a spotlight, so it looks a bit odd. Again, reference pictures of a moonlit scene might help. Keep working on it- you have a nice start and I'd like to see where you go with it.

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    Rather nice. The spotlight from the sky is very moody.

    You mat want to bring the focus to the Guardian himself, though, as there are several things that take attention away, like the house and the meat rack. A radiating light from him could do this, or more saturated colors, or an irregular shape that draws the eye.
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    Edited

    Made some changes but its not finished yet.
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    Things I like:
    -the mood in the first version, not so much the stark light in the latter
    -the fish rail is a great detail. I say make more of these, maybe a net in a heap. some more buckets with water and some with fish

    What needs work:
    -the glacier and the house look completely disconnected. Try to tie them together a little bit more
    -the floor is very bare. Try adding more stines and debris.
    -enlarge the figure a little.

    WHen I get home I'll try to make a paintover, if its okay with you.

    Cheers mate
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    sure I dont mind a paintover. thanks
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    Its a good start, but remember, detail in the foreground is usually more important than detail in the background. Increases depth. I might try adding some snow to the various objects in the foreground. They seem a little sterile for sitting out in the open at what looks like the arctic.
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    Here a really fast and paintover. Just think about it and what you like about it. Also the mein focus needs even more definition, but I was unsure if the guy or teh ruin was the focus. Just my thoughts!
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    The guardian edited

    More feedback! thank you
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