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    Ruins over cliff

    Need some feedback please. Thank you.


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    You sort of go into detail and then stop. Sharper shadows would help. Is that the sky or a tree across the top?

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    There's a visual paradox happening with the three pillars on the left and the lintel. The lintel is receding in space much more than the pillars. the close pillar should be closer, and the far pillar should be pushed back to be consistent, but I'd recommend getting some perspective lines in there and redrawing it.

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    I like how you image has cool colors to reflect the mood. I would add a little more hard edges in the fore ground and some more for the leaves in the bg. I love how the pillars show texture and even the smallest bits of grass.

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    Edited

    Some details added and more contrast.

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    The wonky perpsective in this image is hurting the impression of a unified picture space -- take Jason R's advice and redraw the scene using correct perspective and it will help immensely.

    There also seems to be no strong compositional focus to the arrangement. By "Rule of Thirds" the more interesting areas of the picture plane are occupied by nothing of great visual interest, and there are three main visual "attractions" (tri-lith, phallic pillar and bright vine cluster) that vie too much against one another to give the composition any great stability. The brightly lit broken pillar, centrally located, also tends to draw the eye, but has little interest as a narrative element of the scene.

    Give some thought to the "story" this image is intended to tell, and how you want the viewer's eye to move within the picture space to follow that story. Then compose your picture elements in a way to reinforce that.
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