so this spaceship crashes in the desert...

Join 500,000+ Artists

Its' free and it takes less than 10 seconds!

Join the #1 Art Workshop - LevelUpJoin Premium Art Workshop

Results 1 to 5 of 5
  1. #1
    Join Date
    Jul 2008
    Location
    New York
    Posts
    40
    Thanks
    2
    Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0

    so this spaceship crashes in the desert...

    Hello all,

    so this is my second posting, first of this pic. What's missing? I took it as far as I could, now I think I need feedback cuz it doesn't feel DONE.

    Thanks...

    Attached Images Attached Images  
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote  


  2. Hide this ad by registering as a member
  3. #2
    Join Date
    Jul 2002
    Posts
    40
    Thanks
    9
    Thanked 46 Times in 12 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0
    Hi!

    I like the concept and the composition so far, but there are a few things going on that I think could use a little work. First, I would recommend finding reference photos of rocky desert areas in full sunlight. Deserts are going to have a lot more color bouncing around in the shadows: warmer colors bounced back from the sand, and cool blues reflecting from the sky.

    There is too much contrast area of the background with the ship and the smaller figures, which kills some of the sense of depth. You have some nice structures, but they're all a little flat right now because they're all treated with the same intensity. Try having softer edges and less contrast in the background elements to help them sit further back in space.

    There are a lot of superfluous brushstrokes that aren't really helping define the forms; they just make things look choppier than necessary. In some areas it gives nice texture, but when you have scribbling lines over the entire piece it gets very busy. Try letting some areas have broader brushstrokes.

    Also, make sure to keep your shadows consistent. There are nice high-contrast shadows on the rocks and horse, but the horse and rider and space ship aren't casting much shadows.

    Here's a quick overpaint that might better explain things. More colors in the shadows (warm bounced light from the sand hitting the downward facing shadow planes, cool bounced light from the blue sky hitting the upward facing shadow planes); slightly less contrast in the background elements; broader brush strokes in some areas and less quick, thin strokes. I hope this helps a little.

    Attached Images Attached Images  
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote  

  4. #3
    Join Date
    Jul 2008
    Location
    New York
    Posts
    40
    Thanks
    2
    Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0

    Thanks for the feedback

    Thanks jdillon, very helpful. Light temperatures are still challenging...

    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote  

  5. #4
    Join Date
    Jul 2008
    Location
    New York
    Posts
    40
    Thanks
    2
    Thanked 5 Times in 5 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0

    revised desert spacecrash...

    Revised the image, anyone think this is ready for the Finished section or is there something not yet done?

    Attached Images Attached Images  
    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote  

  6. #5
    Join Date
    Feb 2009
    Posts
    412
    Thanks
    78
    Thanked 120 Times in 106 Posts
    Follows
    0
    Following
    0
    I think the horse should be standing still give more tension to the piece
    plus the gallop looks off to the groundplane

    Reply With Quote Reply With Quote  

Members who have read this thread: 0

There are no members to list at the moment.

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •  
Register

Developed Actively by vBSocial.com
The Art Department
SpringOfSea's Sketchbook