In regards to my astronaut, I also love the image of the solitary boy, so I am thinking a triptych! It will allow me to use the previous two, as well as create a "dream free of the boy" image.
thanks T, I did not know and glad your art is ever evolving too...
I want to really look this over, the background is almost the same lightness as the characters and it would have more depth if you darkened it a bit to make it recede, I know the small deer help but a bit of lighting would help further... I would like to see this dad's arm on the child's shoulder, it would feel more nurturing and kind, that is your call though. ah, and more I did not ever see that they killed the mother deer, is this new?
Grandmassa, I'm going to give you an honest, from the gut crit. I hope you don't take this the wrong way as I'm not just crit'ing the form but the idea as well. As to the idea, have you experienced the killing of another life form for the purpose of sport? If so, try to tap into that emotion and allow it to color your image. I mean, as it stands, I find the idea and execution to be generic. I mean that if you are the boy and you killed the deer, use those emotions man to shape the image! In regard to the form, the father seems too rigid, also, what is the rifle resting on? If the ground, shouldn't the end of the barrel be about waist height? I say, loosen the guy up. Perhaps, try to reference your other images, these obviously, hold some meaning to you, I mean, Jesus, an angel trying to escape, a maimed child's struggle, and a boy's realization as to what he's done. What I'm sayin is own this image, make it personal!
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To signify parity, I'd assume. I added some blue lines as a countervailing structure. I'm also thinkin of doing a triptych of child alone, child with dream, and dream without child. I'm curious as to what you think.
New image @ http://www.conceptart.org/forums/att...1&d=1234654430
thanks everybody i highly value your comments and this has been a lot of fun i learned alot about art and about my self this is my final because its the most complete thanks for your time and good luck everybody yall RRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRROOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOCCCCCCCCCCCKKKK KKKK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
guess you decided to leave the ugly text in... your call.... might wanna rethink that.It seriously kills th eonly visual flow you have, which is the composisitonal devises of the orange touches which lead your eyes to connect withthe deer. the big blast of orange text above it might as well say DRINK BEER! for all the visual sense it makes. and why is there a shiny highlight in th eguy's ass? its the lightest focal point in the piece. nearly all of the copositional problems I mentiond in the begining still remailalthough the value and cotrast are better
tsjuni- a tryptich would be interesting , the continuous format is a is really a challenge. to make it cohesive yet disticly have a reason for it to be a tryptich. sorry to drop interpretations on your peice. but I think you are actually making art here which is truly laudable.
To see the world in a grain of sand, and a heaven in a wildflower, hold infinity in the palm of your hand, and eternity in an hour.
Just a sketch so far but critiques/tips would be greatly appreciated! To explain the image, he's a little kid going to fight something in a deep ominous cave. I hope you got that without me needing to describe it.
Here's my Final Entry. I had considered a handful of different subject that fit into Loss of Innocence, and they all good ideas. I read somewhere on these forums that when you are creating an illustration to take your first 3 ideas and throw them away. So this is where I ended up, Adam and Eve. Please let me know what you think, I've still got time to apply any feedback to the image.
Ilaekae: Do we need to put a boarder on the images the way the ChOW and COW activities do?