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    Unicorn on the African Plains

    Just a scribble that got overworked. Mightily overworked. Any crits at all would be most helpful, no matter how small. Crits related to shading would be nicest. But, anything you see wrong I'd love to hear about.
    Be as harsh as you want.
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    Oh yes, before anyone says anything about horse anatomy... meant to be a new species. Some kind of ungulate.

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    id use less yellow light reflected on the horsey, since now it looks like the grass is an actual lightsource

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    Thanks! I'll see what it looks like...
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    Better?
    I've just discovered bounced light, so I tend to over exaggerate it sometimes.

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    I love the ss you got going there on the left ear. as for the rest of the shading I'd say that you should try to play around with different shadow values to push stuff forward (like the head/neck/horn and think of it as adding lessening contrast) I think it would really make it pop out a bit more. Anyways nice comp and fun subject!

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    SS? I'm sure it's a compliment, but I have no idea what you mean.
    Also, when you say play around with the values... make them darker or lighter? Change it around?
    (Sorry, I must seem really thick.)

    Oh, and thanks, too!

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    ss=subsurface scattering (when light bounces around inside a material kinda)

    wait a sec and I'll do a quick paintover, sometimes I don't seem to be able to explain myself.^^

    [edit] hope this helps, obviously do it better than this.^^

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    Oh, yeah, I've been experimenting with that a lot lately. Glad it's paying off.
    And, if you did that would be most helpful. Thankyou!

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    That neck looks way better! Thanks, I shall put it in the final version.

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    Thanks so much. I did the shading up, also changed the horn to gold to make it stand out more, but not sure whether or not I prefer the grey horn.

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    very nice work ayem .

    I'm looking very hard but i really cant find much to crit which for me is a strange thing.
    About the only thing is that you could perhaps make the bottom of the grass a bit darker.

    I would really like to see some proper action shots in an environment from you, it could look quite awesome, judging from your other animals.

    Keep it up.

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    Muzzoid - Thanks. I keep on meaning to do big action shots... but I never can seem to manage. I just... fall apart at the sketching/planning stage. One day... not tomorrow but the next day I shall make it, I will draw an action scene. (Or at least a picture with a scenic background.)
    Grass... good idea! I shall do as such. Then I think I'll submit it to the ol' sketchbook. Thanks!

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    On a side note, I'd like to add that I really like this concept and I do find it hard to find much to crit on also. The grass needs more work, I know its hard because you don't want it do be to sharp, but regular blur don't look that good with the rest of the comp. The anatomy seems to be a bit of or random at the legs and the chest muscles or maybe its the left sternumastoid (front neck muscles connecting to the wishbone, sry my english is a bit crapy lol).

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    Thanks. I did do something with the grass for the final image... made it darker at the bottom. It wasn't much, but it made the grass look more finishes.
    As for anatomy... horses and other hoofed animals are my weakspot... even with refs I fail.

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    Well, the randomness on the knees shouldn't be to hard to fix though ^^ refs or no refs! great stuff nonethless

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    Nice design. He's leaning quite markedly to the left. Flip it and you'll see what I mean.
    Remember that in clear sunlight like this you have three light sources to contend with: The strong, directional light from the sun (white to yellow-orange, depending on time of day), the diffused light of the sky filling in the top planes of the shadow (purple-blue), and the color of the ground plane reflecting into the underplanes (brown/yellow/yellow-green, depending on the surface).


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    *flips* Oh, so he is. Strong wind. Also his eye looks a little funky...
    Also, diffused light... that's a new one I'll have to look into. I've never even thought about it before Thankyou for mentioning it.

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    Interesting creature here.

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    Elwell addressed what I was going to about the lighting.

    Also, the back ear feels uncomfortable and tangent like.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ayem View Post
    *flips* Oh, so he is. Strong wind.
    hahahaha I like that. this pic is looking pretty awesome can't wait to see the final.

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    Elwell addressed what I was going to about the lighting.

    Also, the back ear feels uncomfortable and tangent like.
    Yeah, I spent ages on that ear. In the end, I couldn't find anywhere else to put it.

    hahahaha I like that. this pic is looking pretty awesome can't wait to see the final.
    Pretty much what you see here is final. I posted the 'finished' version in my sketchbook, but after that, a lof of people posted very helpful crits. So, i'm taking in on board for next time. This sounds weird, but after hearing all everyone has to say (about tangents and diffuse lighting) I want to try it on something new, because this doesn't... feel as awesome as it did.

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    Don't mind me, just stopping by to say I reeeeally like this. Sorry for not bringing a crit to the table.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ayem View Post
    This sounds weird, but after hearing all everyone has to say (about tangents and diffuse lighting) I want to try it on something new, because this doesn't... feel as awesome as it did.
    Leave it for a week or so and re-visit it. It's hard to see your work get ripped apart especially when it's such a cute piece. Come back later when you've got your strength back.

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    Leave it for a week or so and re-visit it. It's hard to see your work get ripped apart especially when it's such a cute piece. Come back later when you've got your strength back.
    I've... never done that before. Maybe it would be a good thing to do. And, aw, I love my work getting ripped apart. It helps.

    Don't mind me, just stopping by to say I reeeeally like this. Sorry for not bringing a crit to the table.
    Heh, that's okay. Thanks!

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