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    1st Post Critiques welcome! :)

    Hey everyone..This is my first post here...just wondering if you had any thoughts on my latest piece. Comments and critiques are welcome thanks!

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    Love this!


    Bump out the left hand some more so we could see details on that cool looking guns he's holding.

    Add some orange/yellow highlights, to show the metals on the ground and on the character, reflecting the sky.

    Other than that, I think this lookin really good! :3

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    Nice image. The wind on the tattered cloth on both poles is different.

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    This is looking great. I'd say you should spend a little more time thinking about how the light source hits individual planes in the character. For example, judging by the lighting on his left knee, I'd imagine that his right thigh might have more light on it. Essentially, the main problem is that a little too much is being hidden, considering how bright the sky is.

    The armor design is looking pretty sweet. I'm not sure how successful his right thigh is, for I read it as a forearm, hand and fingers resting on top of the leg.

    Overall this is a great job. Welcome to CA

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    Thanks everyone

    Pmel Oki - Thanks By bumping out do you mean make brighter?

    Black Spot - Thanks but i think you're reading the pole on the right as cloth but it's actually just a jagged piece of metal...maybe i should work on that....

    Havoc DM - Thanks ...i'll add some light to the thigh and try an make it more readable....is it the anatomy that makes it read as an forearm?

    Thanks for the welcome!

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    Yeah! Make the hand, gun, and arm brighter so we see clearly what he's holding, and where he's putting the weight of his arm on! That way, people won't think that his thigh is is forearm. Your sense of anatomy is great. No need to worry about. Just lighting issues for the most part.



    It's an awesome looking weapon your character is holding, we'd like to see more of it. And on the cloak of feathers, add some highlights to them. I love this piece.

    One of the best works I've seen yet, posted in a Critique Center! :3

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    Gorgeous composition!! Really love the atmosphere. Would work great for a magazine cover.

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    Damn, thats a sweet pic. Really. The flags really make the piece, it carries some pretty heavy emotions. I would put a little more detail into the cloak and the flags. The flags look a little too, whole, at the moment. Rips, shreds and holes would make them look even cooler.

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    Great pic. the silhouette is easy to read even in the thumbnail and the whole thing has a very good consistent style with no unpleasant distracting elements.

    I like the quality of the feedback above and I agree with it.

    The smooth simplified mountains in the background could stand to be roughed up a little in my opinion. Just a little.

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    Quote Originally Posted by FOYLE View Post
    i'll add some light to the thigh and try an make it more readable....is it the anatomy that makes it read as an forearm?
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    It's not the anatomy, but the design of the armor itself. I see an alien-like forearm with two of the fingers visible. When I first saw this piece, I saw that fake-arm there. Also, because a lot of the figure is in shadow, it took me a few seconds to see his real right arm (that's probably just me though).

    My suggestion, eliminate the "fingers" on the leg, or make them look less finger-like.

    Edit - After looking again, I feel like I can see 3 "fingers" instead of 2. It's more evident in the original than the red line.

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    Thanks alot everyone i'll def take these helpful ideas and touch this sucker up. I'm loving this forum already...very welcoming

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    Just what is he doing with that pistol? If he's focusing hard on something, his other arm would be relaxed, so the rifle would be sitting on his legs. Which would make a better pose anyway in my opinion. More like a soldier sitting down tired. The green at the top of the image isn't working, nor is the black border. Certain parts of the characters, especially certain parts of the rifle are too dark. Objects appear almost black against strong light, but this light isn't as strong and the ambient light would take effect. Flags are not flowing. Hopefully I'm not saying things you've heard already.

    Keep going!

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    looking at this now I'm like man...this is so nubbins. But hey atleast i still like his gun and helmet...I should do another now that I've learned a little bit....

    thanks for all the crits

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