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    Red face Dana's some kind of dumpy Art Dump.

    With all my so-called 'finished' works I never had the guts to create a thread here.
    So let's start with a jazz poster I had to do for my highschool jazz band. W/ and w/out text.
    Comments and critiques always welcome Thank you!


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    The illustration itself is pretty damn nice. Let me give you a few crits on the type, though...

    First, the font you used (or did you hand draw it?) which curves around the circle, is hard to read, particularly the word Winterfest. You can get away with thin strokes, or crazy serifs, or having it sideways, but all three overloads it. Pick something a little more legible. Second, with all the information text, pick one font and stick to it. As it is now, it looks kind of random and thrown together. Third, I think the text comes too close to the top of the circle. It looks like its crowding the edge and the title. Nudge it down a little.

    Other than that, top notch job!
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    NathanLong- Thanks so much for the advice, I always have trouble with text placement.

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    gorgeous job!
    i like the watercolor-like background texture you got there.
    also!
    kickass job rendering the shiny sax.
    i have such a hard time painting metal FFFFFFF

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    Hi there, I saw this as a WIP in your sketchbook, turned out nicely.
    And the crits: the dude's arm is small in proportion to his body and is also placed lower than where his shoulder should be. That's why he looks kinda like a hunchback. The left hand needs work: thumb's too long and his fingers look flat. The 'fusion' of the lips to the face should be more gradient-ey, without that harsh contour. The text on the circle shouldn't be so condensed, try adding a little space between the letters.

    Hope I could help with this
    Keep up the great work

    ~Charlie~

    PS: thanks for the sb comment

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    sinnerman- thank you for pointing out that arm! I was wondering why his back looked off. I kept erasing and recoloring etc. etc. but nothing seemed to work. thank you

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    Cool poster, well done. I agree with the crit about the type though. Display type is always hard to choose. Allot of typefaces look very cool, but are just not legible in a practical since. Best of luck to you!

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    Here are a few guidelines, I hope you don't mind
    I just noticed the jawline needs work, oh, and the hand

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    sinnerman - That hand looks great ;w; I can't say thanks enough for the help. But when playing an instrument your jaw isn't necessarily closed, so that may seem why the jaw looks weird (that and I used a ref).

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    I would say that it is nicely done, I like it as far as a poster goes, but I agree about the hands and the arms feel a bit short.

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    Clown Face

    Another finished piece to share for the masses. It started off as a self-portrait but things got a little out of hand.
    Com & Crit = very yes.

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    The hair especially looks really flat.

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    Bai_Fan - Yeah I've always had trouble rendering hair. Any tips on how I could make it better?

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    Hot damn I am trying that out right now *0*
    Thanks for the link!

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