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    No Grave for Little Birds

    Hi!
    This here is a work in progress.
    This character is Bird--a little street girl who got her name because she cares for injured birds she finds and befriends them until they die.
    Unknowingly, like her little bird companions, she too is on her way to death as tuberculosis slowly claims her.

    any input is greatly appreciated :>
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    Nice concept and good start. I would say you might want to wrap her "tan" (black lines under her eyes) around the contour of her cheeks a bit more, right now it feels a bit to straight on the right.

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    You are going to bring the rest of it up to the level of her face, right?

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    thanks : >
    And yeah, I'll definately be bringing everything else up to par with her face.

    Here's a quick update before I head on off to sleep--
    Nothing about the scarf is finished :9 so don't be worrying too much about that just yet :]
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    One crit is it feels pretty lively and somewhat warm. This isn't really a bad thing unless you were wanting to stress the whole soon to be dying of tuberculosis thing.

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    thanks!
    The warm look is intentional : > I don't want it to look very cold or bleak
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    I just noticed that the tip of the bird wing is touching the tip of the beak on the necklace. It looks a little strange once noticed, it makes it feel that the bird wing is being touched by the beak or being on the same level (not above or behind)

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    The lips feel really flat, and she is not really reading as a street girl because she is so clean. Her hair is really well maintained, with no debris in it, and her clothing is in such nice condition.

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    I really love the story behind it. I have to agree with what Bai Fan says, her clothes, and really, her overall appearance, seems too clean for a street-girl.

    Keep it goin', I'd love to see the end result!

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    thanks guys! : >

    I live in a city--and I've never seen a homeless person with debris in their hair. Worst I've seen is where their hair starts to form messy dreads and mats due to lack of ability to keep it tidy. Unless they are old and worn/raving mad/drug addicts/etc link link :>

    everything else though--lips, clothes, lack of dirt/grime, bird's wing--I'll fix/work on :>

    thanks again!
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    Well, I live in the mountains and I have rarely seen a homeless person WITHOUT stuff in their hair. You must live in a pretty nice city.

    Rendering style is pretty cool though.


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    I really like this.

    Though you seem to be on the right track, I'd say the background is a tad bit too saturated, almost to the point of distracting. Though the contrast keeps the viewers eyes up high, IMO, it does not promote the eyes exploring the bottom half of the piece.

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    I am not sure... I have faith that after the bottom half of the piece is addressed, it will command a bit of attention itself.

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    thanks for the input guys!

    are there any final points that I should address before I call this done?
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    You might try to get the bird to stand out a little bit more?

    What if there was a bit of cool light coming from below to contrast the top and add some more form?

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