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    this is what I'm currently - some suggestions/ crits?

    so this is what I'm currently working on it's done withour refs until this stage
    and actualy started with playing around with different silluets...

    and before i go finish this I'd like to hear crits.

    Composition
    Gear and stuff
    (and probably a fitting overall color suggestion gor it's not going to stay grayscale)

    so feel free to tear me appart as far as this point allows

    EDIT: close up has more details, it has been added afterwards

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    I really like this, others must have simply missed it.

    I don't know if you're using pure black for the dark areas, but it sure is dark and I don't think there would be that much contrast in such a setting.
    I'm not sure about these gestures of figures in the background. You definitely need other team members for his flag to make any sense, but they need to fit into the environment well.

    For colours, he looks pretty aggressive so we should probably go with red.

    flag = red
    armour = dark red
    recess armour padding = dark grey
    hair = dark blonde
    clouds = dark yellow, light grey highlights
    sky = dark blue

    the gun handle looks too long, lighting should shine on his leg too. It will also get to the gun, give that some attention.

    Average idea, cool execution, good composition, pretty nice armour design and non-cliche clouds. It's going well, I'd like to see the progress!

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    I would say work on the flapping of the flag, it seems pretty generic right now. I think it is looking pretty good, and it might be cool to have some light sources on the armor itself... which would look kind of cool... the downside is that light emitted from tech on the armor would be a bad idea in real design because it makes for an easier target.

    Also be conscious of the sharpness of details when you do them. It might feel odd if you have really sharp lines for his earrings, yet his ears are blurry even though they are the same distance from the camera.

    Can't wait to see how you resolve the legs.


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    thank you both fore your suggestion i i tried to use some of them...

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    Hey, glad to see you've been working!

    Please post smaller images. It's nice to see new textures, and attention to detail on the weaponry. But where is the colour?!

    - I notice a lot of marines/military characters holding their knives in reverse, which I think would work really well here
    - using a serrated edge along the knife's whole blade will lessen its effectiveness. You could put it near the hilt like you have with the scabbard, or just on the 'spine' of the knife.
    - I don't like these new clouds nearly as much. They looked cool earlier, instead of messing with them, just add colour. Just my opinion though.
    - I really like the furry loin cloth. Colouring it in a light brown will make a nice compliment to his red armour (assuming it will be)
    - take the lights on his ab armour all the way down, not just the uppermost plate (just my opinion)
    - lol @ WIP sign
    - COLOUR!!

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