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My latest cartoon character, Dr.Dimitri
Episode 1: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bNEDp0yEKy8
Episode 2: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F1z_iTc60zI
Episode 3: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AsQQfpoQE9Q
Or you can watch them on my site:
comments & critiques welcome, i am still learning on my own, but one day my toons will be on tv!
The first thing that I would have to say is that I think you need to spend more time at the character design stage because I feel the doctor is a bit unappealing.
As far as the story goes, spend a bit more time getting a concise script together and work on timing. In ep.2 when the camera cuts to the friend sandwich on the table I thing the shot lasts too long.
The sound effects are ok, but I think they need to be less in your face. I would drop the volume of them down and add an ambient noise track very low so you don't notice the start and end of sounds so much.
I have to admit that I smiled and the invention tests in ep.2
The most important thing I think I could say is to spend more time in pre-production... and now that I think about it, animation too. You should check out the animator's survival guide by Richard Williams. It will really help your animation.
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