hey maxim; nice comic there. the angles really dynamic and work great in the fight. the intro is good too. I'd have made a little bit more room for the first fruit appearing. let it be at the end of the page. and give the brother a little more time to take out his violin. I kindof missed the making fruits part the first time reading, so I didnt get any after that and had to start over.
there's also some sentences that are a little wacky. like 'this town right here I am going to smash that stupid guitar.'
maybe, 'today I'm going to smash that stupid..", or, "right here in this town,.."
and at the end. "I burn out like as a white hot flame".. just drop the 'as'.
anyway, great to see more sequential work here; that's what we've been missing, and that's what we wanna see more off at the storyboard ring. hope to see more of you!
I can't wait till they meet again!!!
Lovely works.In the first some character sketches are in less quality(seems like anatomy false in the arm holding the guitar) than the brilliant background work.I am talking only about deep detailes, in general its all damn good
I'm up over at ZUDA.COM as OHKO http://www.zudacomics.com/node/1562
if your interested in sentai/shonen/manga this might be for you, if you loathe all those things, well you might not want to bother, haha.
Anyway I'm garnering all the votes I can muster, because this really is a tough battle. Take care and thank you for your time!
Great little Tezuka-but-not-really element in your style. Usually when I see manga online I end up rolling my eyes and moving on to the next image, but there's something really great about yours that just has a nice charm to it.
Take on more anatomy studies and work on foundations a bit, you've got the makings of a promising art style here man, looking forward to seeing you develop it further.