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    enviro wip, nearing fin

    my friends, please lend me your eyes and thoughts as I work to complete this piece.

    I am considering changing some of the lower forground architecture, but I would appreciate opinions first.

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    I think subjects like this are hard to comment on because they are border line abstraction.

    Its hard to crit something like this because a clear frame of reference is more distant. No figures to crit really, the concept is yours...

    I can say that I like it though.

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    Pretty much everything in this picture is very mechanical looking, with lots of hard edges. I would try adding something organic, like a guy leaning over the railing, to give both a sense of size, and break up the angular feel of this piece. Also, the placement of the various objects makes it feel VERY cramped. I would recommend expanding the canvas and changing the placement of everything so its not so stifling (unless that was the look you were going for). I'll post more things if they come to me...

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    hmmm, ok I have a couple ideas that might help this piece out, I will change and repost.

    thanks guys, hey boobs at least you like it and thats a good start

    Dead Reaper thanks for taking the time, let me know what you think again tomorrow, should have changes by then.

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    Hey mate I really like this piece. But my eye doesn't really know where to focus as all the values are quite similar and there is no focal point. You could also push the feeling of depth alot more as it seem quite flat by better work with the values. Good luck! Look at some of my work I am working on enviros to they are challenging.

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    ok Im taking it in a bit of a different direction to get the mood I want, not done but Im off to work so tell me if this is starting to look better. I know the custom brushes are a bit apparent but I plan to hide them a bit when done.

    Oh, I should say this is for this weeks EOW, and the topic is isolation.

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    Neat design skills on display.

    All rubbed out with blue in the second. Yechh. First version was way better. All you had to do to fix the first one was make the bronze-gold colored stuff on the left a different color and darker, so it wouldn't draw too much attention to itself.

    And some real detail in the face of the figure in the bubble. The darker silhouette for his computer screen is good, but your really need to detail out the face. Once you do that and the other thing I mentioned, I think this will look very done.

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    its funny how different people like different things.

    I have already started desaturating some of the latest blue, because I agree it was to prominant. So far all replies in the EOW thread have been that they like the latest one best though.

    I admit there are things I like about both versions, luckily I still have time to play around with them.

    I like the atmosphere and the spacing on the last one, but I liked the idea of the architecture from the first (although I wasnt happy with my first round of rendering there).

    I might try sprinkling it in to a lesser degree into the last version, not sure.

    I'll take more votes on which one looks better, and look for a final version in the next day or so.

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    here is where I ended, I am happy with it but comments are still welcome. Because there are things I like about the first version, I might make tweaks and changes and push that version further as well.

    thanks for all the comments and help so far



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    o wow i love it great depth and contrast on the update

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    The icicles hanging from the sphere seem out of place because the surrounding environment isn't icy in similarity. The mountains in the backround don't have snowcaps and the rising mist from beneath hints at a type of humidity. On second look, I can see a frosty window and more icicle build up on the lights below - maybe the element can be further displayed to give the entire image more of a chill.

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