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I'm working on this mermaid.
it didn't take much,is still rough, but I'm kind of lost right now ..
Any critiques or suggestion will be really appreciated
Thanks a lot
Her noseholes are crooked (too far clockwise from our view). Her left dimple is too far up. Her right breast is TOO SMALL compared to her left. Shade more highlights and shadow to her breast to make it look bigger. Her ribcage looks like it's melting down onto her. Maybe use a fuzzy brush to define her ribcage shadows?
Aren't mermaid tails usually very thin at the bottom where they connect the tailfin?
and for a minute, I thought she was floating underwater, but second look tells me she was lying on the sand.
I hope this helps
Very nice - much potential in this piece!
The arms and head etc are bigger in proportion than her stomach area. If you widen the stomach area a bit more, her top half and breast will sit better.
The tip of the tail could be thinner, as others have said.
Really nice feel this - keep at it!
The first thing that strikes me as a bit of a weak point on this one is how muddy it all is. It's pretty low saturation, low contrast, and it winds up making everything look like it's sculpted out of clay. A mermaid especially, with her slippery scales being underwater, near the surface would probably be getting some shiny spectral highlights in there. Don't be afraid to be bold with your colour choices right from the get go, it can save you a ton of headaches with tweaking colours as the painting progresses (something I definitely have trouble with!)
Solid piece overall though, so there's just some nitpicks for ya. Goodluck!
I really like this piece, so I did a paint over - mainly for proportions, or else I'll end up getting carried away and it wouldnt be fair to you, as you have come for a critique, and I would love to see your progress to finished!
I extended her torso, and reshaped her tail...I hope you approve!
I disagree about the tail. Who says that it has to be thinner, what if a mermaid's tail was more to that of say a dolphin. I also like the original positioning of the tail - it gives it more drama.
I really like the lighting effect in the body of the original one too. I would like to see more highlights on the hair and the tail. I would also like to see a bit more contrast in this piece. I like the gill effect too.
One thing I noticed alot in underwater pieces is that their is a lot of color and drama. Water reflects light both above and below.
Overall I really like this piece.
"Creativity emerges only when the imagination is given the freedom it deserves."
How you do the tail is aesthetic to almost everyone who looks at it. Everyone expects the little mermaid when they think of .. well mermaids. If you want to break the ice and make one that actually is a functional fish, go with the dolphin model (as razorleaf suggested).
The human side is looking good, but very chunky. Your edges need to be smoothed and defined. I'd also like to see the introduction of another color aside from Blue.
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thank you so much guys,
you've given me a lot of good suggestions(and thanks especially to Molly for the paintover,you were right on proportions) but I think i like a big tail,after all.
l'll also try to work seriously on lights and contrasts.
I'll post the new one soon (hopefully)!