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    "A Cup of Tea?" and "Japanese Culture"

    Hi everyone,

    I created this thread to ask you to critique and advise me what is wrong with this two works..

    If you don't see it properly, please visit my deviant art page and they are there. (link on signature)


    "Japanese Culture"

    "A Cup of Tea?"


    Thank you for seeing this.
    I expect your advises and comments

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    sorry for the mistake

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    In Japanese Culture, the line weights are disproportionate. Objects closer to the "viewing point" should be thicker, and objects further away should be thinner. However, your tea cup is "spot" on in that sense My only fight is the handle on the spoon seems a bit off with the shading and makes the spoon appear to bend more than necessary. I dont know how to address it, but thats me just being very nit picky

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    Nice works really dig the tea-cup.
    It took me a while to figure out that the top three were actually one big drawing I think that the cause of this is due to the fact that the perspective isnīt the same on all three the one furthest to the left looks like itīs been build on a hill with no regards for the people living there, having to crawl there way through the house, where as the two others have a pretty straight perspective (horizontal-line).
    Might wanna draw a horizont-line through all three.
    Thatīs about it Keep it up

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    RE:

    I haven't realized the "line weights" yet xD But yes, that's true. It's a mistake that I'll try not to do on my next projects. Thanks

    The spoon of the cup is a little bit too saturate. Maybe if I used a grey color it would look better

    Thanks for your comment and thanks for the critique

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    DK Sketch,
    thanks for comment. When I noticed that perspective error it was too late: I had already started to "color" it. :s

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    The japanese piece is very nice. Just work on the line weights. Look around you when you are outside. when things are closer you can see the lines that forms around the object much clearer compare to objects in the backgorund.

    Other than that dude, keep it up.

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    Why do you have that square in the middle of the tea cup? That bit looks like a photo and I don't understand the reason for it.


    I didn't think it was possible to be called an artist when you have nothing to say. It's like being a writer who publishes individual words as books and expects to be praised for it.
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    thanks laughing I will try to improve it

    Black Spot, the tea cup is based in a detail from a poster. That's the square pasted into the canvas. Got it?

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    I like the teacup. But the way the edge of the cup just touches the edge of the table is setting up a little compositional tension that I find a touch unnerving.

    I can't believe I typed that last sentence. It sounds so lunatic.

    Also, I'm of two minds about the marks in that piece. The way your lines neither follow the direction of the light nor the shape of the object. Part of me sort of likes that, in a graphic-y, poster-y way. Part of me wishes the lines were more illustratorly and informative. Or maybe just less spikey.

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    Quote Originally Posted by migalmeida View Post
    Black Spot, the tea cup is based in a detail from a poster. That's the square pasted into the canvas. Got it?

    Regards
    Thanks for the explanation, I was just curious.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Stoat View Post
    Also, I'm of two minds about the marks in that piece. The way your lines neither follow the direction of the light nor the shape of the object. Part of me sort of likes that, in a graphic-y, poster-y way. Part of me wishes the lines were more illustratorly and informative. Or maybe just less spikey.
    I don't understand this comment
    Could you explain it better please?

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