Some new stuff for fun and work Newest stuff up top. Hope you enjoy. Characters were about 3 hours apiece. The environment took about 3 days all told. A higher res version of the enviro piece at my blog. http://raylederer.blogspot.com. Thanks for looking...
This illustration is from a design brief for a book called Green by Jay Lake that is due to be published soon by Tor books. Dan Dos Santos has the honor of illustrating the real cover and it's a beauty. I'm fortunate enough to have had some great input from Dan, Scott Fischer, Greg Manchess, Rebbecca Guay, Donato, Boris and Julie, Dave Palumbo and the rest of the IMC alumni of 2008. Thanks all! I could not have progressed as far as I did without your help and encouragement!
****UPDATED***: I did a bit of tweaking to the legs to get rid of the heavy handed musculature. Not a big change but I think it helps some. Thanks for the input everyone!
Wow beautiful coloring and lighting here. However I do have to agree with the others here. There are some anatomy issues here. Like the legs,and the arm with the bow looks odd. Her head looks a bit to big for her body as well.
Ebony-chan: Thanks. I'll have another look at some of those anatomy issues. I think If I eliminated the chiseled look of her legs that would solve it since I did use my own photo ref for the figure.
rubbadub: Wow! Thanks for the Nox nod! I'm a fan of his work for sure. As for the anatomy issues I'll have to be more careful with my next piece. Thanks for the feedback!
Cepro: Thanks Cepro. Compositionally there's nothing I can do about that at this stage. I'll just move on with lessons learned from this one You've helped me to see more clearly.
rubabdub: Thanks rub. The original oil painting is more or less covered up with digital now. It was a weird backwards learning experience for me . I used Donato's technique of blowing up the original comp on a copy machine and transferring it to masonite using a brayer and matte medium. Since it was my first time doing a real oil illustration I made a lot of mistakes from the beginning so I took the relatively fleshed out painting, photographed it and worked it over in PS. I learned a bunch from that experience and look forward to applying that knowledge to the next piece.
Alex Alexandrov: Thanks for the feedback. The hand was intended to be foreshortened to face the viewer a bit however it seems as though that's not being communicated so I'll need better eyes on the next piece during the process.
shashank: Thank you!!! ...
I think I'll post in the WIP section here for my next piece 'cuz you've all got some great input.
Last edited by rlederer; August 2nd, 2008 at 04:11 PM.
Hi Ray, it's a good strong piece, and I know that it's too far along for major modifications. Here are a couple of comments to bear in mind for the next one, though.
Everyone seems to agree that the pose is a bit awkward, especially her squat. Part of the problem is that it's built around a straight, vertical line of action that runs down her spine and right between her symmetrical legs. I really love the action of her hair, and I played around with shifting her torso to follow that, so that the entire pose is built around reflected diagonals, with no perpendicular actions. (Horizontals and verticals give stillness and stability, diagonals give action.) Also, I brought her left knee forward so the legs wouldn't mirror each other.
Elwell pegged exactly what I saw as the problem with the legs. Other than that, I'm going to add to the praise. Very well painted overall. The composition works really well on its own and as a book cover.
Elwell: Wow! Thanks for the quick sketch Tristan. That's awesome! I totally see what you're mean. That makes perfect sense. I think I took my photo-ref too literally instead of embellishing on the pose. I'll think a little quicker on my feet next time around. This is tremendously helpful. I feel like I should buy you a beer or something now! You rock...
Hey man iv just been to your blogspot .... that class you took is something super ultra cool .. i saw you painting in the early state .. and i think that it looks so much better without the strong muscles that you put after that ...
Hey Thanks Alex. I was going for something specific in terms of the character but I think the lesson learned here is to not stick too religiously to my own preconceptions of what 'should' be but rather what looks best.
Yes the class was absolutely life changing. The camaraderie and spirit of purpose was like nothing I'd ever felt before. I'm still having flashbacks of wonderful moments and the genuine warmth of everyone involved. Sign me up for the next one...