Well, here's the new one. I *tried* to be deliberate with my strokes, but I'm afraid I got a bit lost at the bottom of the guy's jacket.
There are some nice highlights that would show up nicely with a darker background, but I'm terrified of screwing this up.
Any help or crit is appreciated.
ETA: I'm not thrilled with the background, but it hurt my brain to go 'white on black' instead of the usual 'black on white' type sketching.
Obviously, since it's ink, it's beyond help now, but I'd love to hear how to do it better next time.