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    Hm. There's a lot that I like about it. I especially like -- don't laugh -- the way you've made her knees red. Flesh is different colors in different places -- especially white people flesh, which is really not white but clear so some of our internal junk shows through.

    Is she leaping straight up? It looks that way. She should pitch forward a little if she's leaping forward. Is she swinging on something, or is she swinging something? I realize this is a WIP, but I'm trying to get the narrative.

    The proportions aren't perfect, but they fall inside the bounds for deliberate exaggeration, I think. You know what would be really cool? Breasts are jiggly squish-bags. I bet a real woman would find the metal (?) of that bodice visibly pressing into her flesh. You know what I'm saying?

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    Gotta agree with Stoat with her tilt. I think her legs might be okay but her torso is definately too vertical to indicate the kind of jump that the background indicates. I'd suggest either that her torso tilt backwards (to indicate that she lead into a massive jump by sheer leg strength and to accentuate the action of that whip thingy she's holding) or that her torso tilt forwards (which is a more realistic way of showing a jump of that force by putting her full weight into it).

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    Excellent idea, Stoat, on the skin pressingon the bodice. I'll try and take all the crits into action.

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    Oh, wow. Nice catch, Jason. I didn't even see that

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