So, what needs the most work?
...are you looking for a crit at all? Or just posting this here for the hell of it?
I don't know who Leo is.
So, what do you want a crit on? Line work, composition?
The image is fine; the line work- fine and composition too. I suppose a better, more constructive crit would be given once colour is added. But seeing as this image is rather stylised, it seems to work well in b/w....
It's hard to know what you're going for with this thing since you won't provide any information about it. (Is this for a friend, school newspaper, national publication... Is it someone you know? Is he supposed to look angry? stressed? crazy?)
The composition is fine. If it's designed for general viewing then the slogan doesn't make sense. If it's an inside joke that the target audience will understand then that's fine.
My opinion on the character: The neck nose and lips are the most confidently executed parts in my opinion. the eyes are ok. the eyebrows could probably do with a bit of a curve. The hair could probably use a little more detail and the ear is a little distracting due to it's due to the fact that there is no central hole.
The front few upper teeth create a tangent with the line that defines the far side of his mouth. Also those same teeth seem a little sloppy compared to the rest of the teeth.
Thanks, this is the kind of critique I'm looking for.
I hope none of this will sound like it was typed with a "smart-ass" tone. I'm just trying to answer things clearly.
[quote=Psychotime;1856498]Inside jokes are my thing.[quote] That response helps a little, at least we know that we aren't supposed to "get it". In future threads, you might want to just explain the inside joke so we can critique more effectively.
Thanks for sharing this art.
You drew a funny cartoon of the guy.
However, you need to make the funny actually funny. So minus 1200 cool points from your current CoolPoint™ score... leaving your CoolPoint™ grand total at negative one million four hundred twenty thousand six hundred and twenty two. (Sadly, the more one tries to be cool, the more cool points are subtracted. Funny how that works.)
At least Icarus tried!
My Process: Dead Rider Graphic Novel (Dark Horse Comics) plus oil paintings, pencils and other goodies:
My "Smilechild" Music. Plus a medley of Commercial Music Cues and a Folksy Jingle!:
I recognized who it was in the b&w thumbnail, but that still doesn't make the joke work for me. Was there a crossover somewhere??
Artwise, I'll give you a couple on inking. The halo is pretty unnecessary as he has no spot blacks to compete with the background. Seems like you just didn't want to let the precious outline go to waste. Stylistically it works for me when colored, but not b&w. It might be good to get out of the habit of preserving the contour with a halo, because it sometimes interrupts the flow of a scene AND you can do some pretty great work when characters merge with the spot blacks (a la Mignola).
On the interior I'd like to see some more line weight...like you started to do with his nose. It would really make all those facial stylization lines pop.
*GASP!* That's blastphemy, waranghira!
You know, I did think a little flat shade would be nice on the hair and collar, but...just being flats didn't hurt it for me.