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    In need of crits and suggestions

    something is wrong with the hip, but I don't quite know where to start fixing.
    The pose is getting challenging to get it right, i will double check with a mirror as well.
    And anything else is welcomed, as I am still trying to complete this image and move on.

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    I dont see anything wrong with the hips right now, but his torso looks a litte too short? Oh and his eyes seems to be too far from each other, and his right palm is too long. You could use some more color in the skin. Otherwise, its looking good

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    i had my bro pose for me... (should have done it before i start) and realized some of the problems.

    new adjustments in place... keep going.

    Parsakoira: thanks for the crit, I will look into them.

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    lengthen the body. I am changing the pose.

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    i'd say the eyes are too wide. His jaw could be bigger, right now his face is kinda long and thin. Also the hair feels a bit plastic, not like hair, and it does not match the textured wall behind him. other than that i think the pic is kinda cool, keep workin on it!


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    This is a pretty good start. I think you need a much harsher light on his clothes. That beam of light coming down is very intense but there's almost no indication of it on his clothes. You do have some on the face but not enough. The other thing that feels off is the direction of the light. You have it coming down meeting the corner of his shoulder yet his face is getting it but it's completely in shadow? move that beam of light over to about the ear or so. That might help. It just looks funny.

    The lower right corner whith the orangish floor should be changed in tone. Make it more of a wood color or something similar to what you have on the floor in shadow. The light will be hitting it of course but you get my drift.

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    thanks for the detailed feedback RoboBobo. I will get to work on it.

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    Working after the feedback-

    I curved the value a bit, now it's getting a lot brighter.
    Added more lights to the jacket. (need to work on the pants and shoe)

    I am going to leave the eyes the way it is, and the bright splash of colors that doesn't make logical sense,
    calling it a stylistic choice until I start hating it. (but I would like to keep the lighting, texture, material, and overall body proportion near as realistic as I can.)

    Ideally.... I wanted the bright side of his face to receive lighting from the intense lit wall.... but if that doesn't work I will move it up once more.
    I will keep working on the hair... to sort of give it a gelled hair look (or else how can I justify this hair do...)

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