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  1. #1
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    Hi Everyone. New to CA and looking to improve.

    Hi. I've been browsing about CA for the last several months and it has really inspired me to try to refine what talent I have. I began digitally painting about six months ago, and before that I had only occasionally sketched a classmate's face in my idle time or penciled in the odd character at a friend's request. When I discovered concept art in general and CA in particular it really set off a desire in me, and I think I have already improved by leaps and bounds from where I started. I have a long way to go though and hope that you all can help me.

    These are my latest paintings and a page of a comic that two friends are writing. The lettering on the comic is temporary, I can't seem to do it very well.

    The dragon picture is for a children's story that I wrote about a dragon and a cow that befriend one another, and this is their first meeting.

    Thank you very much for your time and criticisms.

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    Got some good stuff going in the actual drawings. Bit of trouble with the narratives though, in the first and 3rd ones. Starting with the 3rd, what's going on? Are you showing battle weariness? Victory? A stroll in the field? Try to communicate these more clearly.

    The first one has... continuity problems.
    Edit: No, thats not a continuity problem. The trouble is that you've shown the guy choking the girl with the arm that she just broke, not the one with the fork stuck in it. Or at least it looks like that give the angle of the arm- the hand looks to ambiguous, either side could be the thumb right now.

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    The horse in the corn in the bottom one has really loooong legs!

    The dragon may look more complete with front claws and small teeth.

    The girls arms look like sticks and her hands are tiny in the comic strip. In the second pic her arms stand out as looking poorly drawn. And it is hard to work out where the fork comes from- a bit confusing- but I suppose a narrative will help, but a well worked out comic should work without words. Her expression is flat even though she is being throttled.

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    Hi. Thank you very much for the crits. I should have posted the page before for the comic... I have about 15 pages done now, and picked the one that I thought I was having the most trouble with. I think that it is page 10. I agree with both posts' crits, I will work on changing the arms of the woman, and making the arm of the man more clear.

    The warrior is supposed to be desperately running from a losing battle, and finally giving up as the opposing army overtakes him... but I'm still not very sure how to convey that...

    Here is the page that comes before the one at top so that you can better judge how well the story is told. I have to admit that I've never really read comics, so I need all the help I can get with comic art.

    Thanks again.

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