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    would need help on composition please

    it's still a bit rought so I'm not focusing on the details yet, but something feels off with my picture, it doesn't have the magical/mysterious feel I'd want it to have. Any clues why? Or what I could do to help the composition?

    edit: I also tried changing the foreground character's size to see how it would affect the piece's balance:
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    I like the composition of the one where you made the forground smaller. To me, that is a major improvement.

    You have both a lamp and a moon to produce light, so add darker shadows, and brighter highlights to the surroundings.

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    Make sure the binoculars are actually aimed at what the character is looking at, which I think is the moon-figure, right? It is a bit off on both pictures, like she is looking past the picture frame. The midground trees and shrubs look very flat... you can really use these to convey a sense of distance between the figure and the background. Once you get the inconsistencies fixed, you can achieve the mood you are going for with lighting. Right now, you have two light sources, the lamp and the moon/starlight... you can achieve a lot of drama with these. I suggest looking at pics of nighttime photography.

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    It's kind of hard to see the binoculars- try to make them stand out a little more, and it'd probably help if we could see a little bit of the hand that's holding them (or even the elbow). Try getting a more interesting angle on that lamp as well, the straight-on view is kind of boring and it flattens everything.

    Looks a lot better with the shrunken foreground.

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    I never noticed the aim of the binocular was off, I'll try and fix that up. I've been trying to add more depth to the trees to you know, make the people feel the depth of the whole thing, but I'm having a hard time at it

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    you need some unity in the colors.
    composition is not bad, but... bah... it 's gonna be easier to show you.
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    would need help on composition please

    It's quickly done though.
    but, I think the position of the arm holding the lanter doesn't seem natural
    you should just leave the light on the floor and use the arm to hold the binoculars, wich would make them more obvious

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    I don't! At all, I love paint overs, a picture's worth a thousand word after all :p

    I love what you did with the lamp light casting over the ground, which is definatly missing in my picture. I'll try to unify the colors some more, and post a new WIP as the picture has changed.

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    here's where I'm at right now, I tryed to adjust colors the best I could, I lifted up the binoculars, gotten the foreground character slightly smaller and the lady on the moon to, but I'm still truggling giving the background some depth,

    edit: oh, and i've given a bit of an angle to the lantern

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    okay i've been working on the background a bit, i think the vegetation has a bit more depth now, i'd like to keep on enhencing the background's qualety, all helps on things i could add, should and shouldn't do welcomed.

    edit: I also trying throwing in a third light to highlight the subject's silouette a bit, what dyou think? I find it makes the pic a bit more eye catching, but I know I'm a sucker for thirdlights so maybe it's just my tastes getting in the way of my objectivity xD
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