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March 14th, 2008 #1
My still life... Critique please?
A still life that was part of my highschool portfolio that Im almost finished with, the apple isnt finished yet. kinda blurry.
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Its hard to critic because the foto is bad.
March 15th, 2008 #3
yeah Im going to get a better pic of it when i get my portfolio back, sorry.
March 15th, 2008 #4
Wow the martini glass is really nice. Something about the top of the apple looks a little off though. Like it lacks definition. Were there more darks/lights there that you left out? It could just be an odd angle that is throwing me off though. I honestly can't put my finger on it.
But nice martini glass!
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March 15th, 2008 #5
March 16th, 2008 #6
Thank guys, When i get this piece back i'll update.
March 16th, 2008 #7
nice work! A few things that strike me right off the bat:
1.the shadows on the grapes are too light in value, since they occupy such a large portion of your composition, this makes it hard to determine where the light is coming from. Moreover, this flattens the work as a whole.
2.based on the highlights, the lights, the light source is up and to the left, if such is the case, the apple would have a stronger core shadow that you are currently not showing. Again, this would strengthen the three-dimensionality of your work.
3. Having some "blurry" elements is not a bad thing, do not obsess over trying to make a work uniformly delineated...lost and found edges are a staple of good paintings and you should try to integrate them into your work.
4. For your next paintings, try more exciting color choices, right now your palette is really based on local color i.e (a grape is green, so I'm going to make it all varying shades of green). The influence of light does interesting things to colors, one of the most important things you need to consider is color temperature. For excellent advice on the subject check out Sergei Bongart's notes
here are some of his works as examples
Even if you like making tighter paintings, good color will make your paintings much more exciting. Also, it looks like you might be working from a photo, if you are, don't. Still life is about experiencing the objects in real life and being confronted with real color. Of course if you are working from life then ignore this last comment.
Hope this helps,
March 16th, 2008 #8
Thank you panchosimpson, Your advice is extreamly helpful. This is my 3rd still life I worked on, I took the picture at night after i finished it, so the flash on the camera washed out a little of the color, like the green grapes had a little purple in them, also the right side isnt as dark in the real painting. Im going to be going to the columbus college of art and design this fall, can't wait!
March 16th, 2008 #9
March 17th, 2008 #10
Most likely fine art, if not i might go with illustration.