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    Arrow Illustration. Three of them. From a storyboard of eleven.

    This is three illustrations from a storyboard of eleven. I will not make the rest, but these images have been somewhat of an awkening for me. Please comment on these so that I can improve on later illustrations. Thanks for looking, and if you post crits, an extra thank you Sir/Madam

    I'll also post these in my sketchbook.

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    Wow.
    I'm sure the story is dark and weird.....

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    I've liked these ever since you started posting them in the Crit Center, and even considered moving them here myself. My only suggestion is that you could clean up some of the linework in the first one (her mount's ghost ear, and the clouds overlapping her ears).


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    The story is not as dark as it mught look. It's a small story about how kids in school are forced out of their personalities and creativity. As someone famous said: People are born creative, then learned not to be. That is quite probably a horribly quoted quote, but you get the point.

    Thanks Elwell.
    I'm looking at these drawings as kind of milestones in a way. I've never made anything this finished, but having forced myself to do these, it does not seem so scary to try harder and make more finished images. I won't do ay changes to these images, but I will be sure to take more care of the linework in future illustrations.

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    ha!...good post here, I belive cose you have more, I surely want to see more...I realy like your line and the colors too...the storyes are crazy enough.
    bravo!

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    wow you've got a cool style , keep it up.

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    Gormor: Thank you

    mccatana: Thanks I will hopefully draw something during the weekend and post. These images kind of fired me up a little. So be sure to check back

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    Looks good, some really weird atmosphere is going on there.

    Some perspectives are off here an there, especially in the first image.
    You have distorted the school house way to much, should never use a very strong perspective on objects that are so far away coz to have such an effect you would need a FOV so strong that you would probably only see a toe distorted all over the screen of your character in the foreground.

    I would also remove the help like from her face and elsewhere in the other images.
    The design may be a matter of taste, personally i have to admit that this bunny girl has the same effect on me as the teletubbies.
    Giving her smile some teeth would help IMO, maybe making her eyes less reflective too.

    I like the other school kids, they look worked out and the proportions are more in harmony.

    The pint where her neck connects to her head seems a bit wonky...
    Also the perspective and her proportions in the last image are off.
    her right arm is at least twice as thick as the other arm and much longer too.
    Her dress seems much longer here than in the first image and unlike in the first one she seems to have eyebrows now.

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    Very fun. You've a good sense of character!

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    Thats some really nice work! I agree with Randis, but still good overall!

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    are you the character designer on this project as well? because those little skull-class-ppl kick serious ass!

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    impressive artwork, and ya original to , but it has a true scent to it , when today's schools try to make out of children mindless zombies (how will later study later finances , management and marketing) only some stand up ... being colorful .

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    The design of the zombie kids is great! I looked at your sketchbook and you are improving at an amazing pace. Your style is really developing and I think that this is a breakthrough project. Your work reminds me a bit of James Jean....take that as a compliment because I love Jean's work.

    Your linework is beautiful. I agree that it could use some cleaning up though to really make it shine. I also think that the background on the first image could be a bit better resolved. You might experiment with lowering the opacity of the linework on the background elements to make them recede a bit more. You can also play with making slightly more monochromatic backgrounds to make your foreground character stand out.

    I want to see more. The story sounds intriguing!

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    These are great, I really love them. Way to go..

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    I find these very endearing.

    beautiful work I enjoy them alot.

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    Thanks for the crit everyone I'm looking around here in the holidays, and saw that I had missed alot of posts in this thread
    I really apreciate your comments, and I'm very happy that you guys like the characters.

    Randis: All your points are very valid, and I will see what I can do.

    Petitemistress: Thanks Yes I am. Was alot of work to make tham feel right.

    So thanks again for the comments and a happy new year!

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