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    Timmy- a picture book * update 02/09/08 *

    Hi
    Just finished a 50 page picture book. I've been working pretty much in a vacuum for the last 3 years and would really appreciate some input before I start sending it out to publishers. Here are the first few pages.

    Thanks in advance
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    Pretty incredible stuff! What did you create this in? Only suggestion I might make is to place some of the type in the dead areas of your pictures instead of automatically running it on the bottom most of the time. Otherwise, beautiful stuff!
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    these are freaking amazing, let me get a copy.. now!
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    dude, these are AWESOME! I'm dying to know how you created them. It's obvious that some are painted, but I'm racking my brain over the ones that look photo real. You've only showed me 6 images and I already want to know what happens next. Great story, awesome visuals, I want one!
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    Beautiful work! I'd love to see the rest of it of course This is mostly 3d isn't it? I think you won't have much trouble convincing the publishers that the visuals are incredible. Top notch quality! About the type suggestion, well, that definitley can be much better.. Maybe if you frame the images (a frame designed by yourself of course), you can leave the text out of the frame, so it won't interfere with the pictures themselves? Try to use some Sans Serif typefaces (like Helvetica, Agency, or maybe even some very technical looking ones.. you can find some great ones in www.dafont.com)-

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    Gorgeous imagery... are these models?

    I think your typography is REALLY letting you down. The font is pedestrian, it's hard to read and is adding nothing to the story or the world you've created. In fact, I think it's taking away from it. I think a more robotic / mechanical feeling font (maybe like a digital clock) would feel better. Maybe a slight drop shadow would help it stand out a swell.

    Either way... I think you need to address that.

    Still... I want a copy when you're done. Why not try and self publish (lulu.com) or some other site like that? I'm sure if you posted the work here and on other CG sites you'd get a number of sales. Hell, you may even want to contact Ballistic (CGTalk.com) about the book.

    Great stuff...
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    Beautiful, beautiful. Especially Timmy's hands, the sloth, the giraffe.

    You might want to get someone else to do the typography.
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    I absolutely agree that the font is not working.
    It comes off as very "1st pass" and not final at all.

    I would also go so far as to say the story is a little weak with what I have just read, and I think the pictures themselves tell a much greater story. I think instead of having the type overlapping your amazing images, maybe the book could be formatted so that the story was on the page prior to the art (simply on white, possibly with some kind of artistic border that you create) and maybe make it a bit more like a novel if you insist on words?

    I'm sure you already have it planned out, I'm just saying that in it's current form the words aren't working for me. It comes off like a children's book when the art is much more professional looking.

    Please take no offense, but maybe find a dedicated writer to write you a story based on the idea you already have?

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    First, let me say that I love the look and feel of the world you have created. However, there are several issues that I feel you must address.

    - Your use of photo-realism makes the images look like stills from a film. My immediate impression is that these stills don't do justice to the pages of a book. I want to see the robots and mechanical pieces moving! My suggestion is to somehow frame these images so they are anchored to the page more, and look like they belong there.

    - The issue of typography and page layout has been mentioned, and I definitely agree that something must be done. I sure hope that those images you posted with white text on top are not the final pages.

    The story sounds intriguing. I think it will appeal to a wide audience. Children's publishers might want to see some more color, though. I love the design of that little guy, and really do want to see this as an animation!
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    First off, great images.
    However, I agree with what has been said. It's very important that the text, what it says and how it appears in the book, should further develop mood, anticipation, focus, all the things you've already accomplish in your illustrations. You might need to hire a writer and typographer, unfortunately.
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    Holy cow, this is beautyful and sad at the same time.
    Poor timmy
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    I would love to see this book! Let us know when it gets published!.
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